I know it's been quite some time since you've written this and I was hoping that maybe you'd get some inspiration and come back to this story, I have really enjoyed reading what you have so far. Please come back to this story!

I love your pen name. It's cute and adorable. It reminds me of a little girl playing in the summer breezes, with bubbles being blown around.

I can appreciate that you didnt make her perfect, but reading any kind of character description makes me skip ahead. Try shortening it to something memorable.. "she was built like..." rather than 'chunky thighs'.

And avoid any description not coming from another character, preferably one that gives us more insight to the character doing the describing. After all, Cap'n Jack might think she looks like a goddess while someone else thinks she looks like an overfed bar-maid. Thats fun AND lets us see her in our own mind's eye rather than trying to adjust to your mind's eye.

You're good at character capture and your writing is readable. Keep going! I expect you'll only get better.

Interesting

update soon. preferable tonight.

WHAT! Your stopping? Writing something else? To quote Jack Sparrow: "stop blowin' 'oles in my ship!" You just took a chunk outta my stern.

Please get back to this SOON! It's really good.

please write more soon...I really like your story, it's well written, and compelling.

by the way, i think you're portraying Jack really good...two thumbs up!

I caught up! And I love it. Though, at times, I hate Emaline. So snotty. But, I think that's great for character development. You've written her well. In making her so...unlovable, her transition will have to be profound. Yeah, keep up the good work. Can't wait for an update.

I haven't been able to read it all as of yet, but what I've read is excellently done. I love the Jane Austen references. Awesome. I hope to review again once I've caught up.

WOW you are SUCH an AWESOME KICK- $$ writer! I mean it, you ROCK! This is SO good, you have to update! Add more! Put up the next chapter! I NEED MORE!

Good start! I like it so far, it has potential. I like your character, she seems like the average "accomplished" young lady of that time period. I was wondering, did you get the name Darcy from Pride and Prejudice? Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading! Excellent job!

i'mr eally really enjoying this story! please post more soon :D

This is a brilliant story! The pages fled past, I think you've got a great way of telling your stories, and you keep your reader interested. I can't wait for the next chapter, it's a fantastic adventure. ;)

Very well written, me likey. Plz write more soon. ~ moron ~

Very good, I'm impressed I like Emaline, she's not to perfect but she's likeable all the same