|Reviews for Linda Danvers: Girl of Steel 1 Linda's New Hom|
| Professional Critic chapter 1 . 8/9/2003
What The Bitter One said. In addition, your innane attempt at detail. Describing simple actions in run on sentences is unneccessary and merely adds space. And what's with the product placement? Do all the companies you ID by name pay you royalties or something? Yes, I've read your other "Linda Danvers"(whoever this chick is, it AIN'T DC's Linda), but just as a reminder that there are writers a helluva lot worse than me.
| The Bitter One chapter 1 . 8/8/2003
The mind boggles at how you even think you can write fanfiction. A good portion of the people who read your fics think you are a self-absorbed prick with all the symptoms of Asperger's Syndrom. I think you are the other hand have no idea how to write at all. The editing job is choppy, you have both girls get in the driver's seat. Possible, probable? No way. The prose is wooden and you have no idea how to write natural sounding dialogue. The lesbianism, your trademark, is forced and very horribly done. Stop wanking and start doing some serious writer's research. At least you didn't fill up your fics with Godawful 80s bubblegum pop and your psuedo-knowledge about Anime. Get a life Mark and forget about that lame-ass Sailor Moon fan-dub of yours. The world does not need another piss-poor dub. The characters were OOC and you had spoilers for movies without warning the readers as well as the homosexuality in the story. And stop with this copyright of Mark Moore bullcrap. It doesn't belong to you. This is another perfect example of what NOT to do in a fanfic.
| Alan Wilkinson chapter 1 . 8/6/2003
Nice to se this continue. Superman's involved? Curious. Wonder what Batman would make of Linda.
She trademarked the 'S'?