Reviews for Ryoga Chan, Uberman! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Hopefully youll continue this funny Ryoga-story. Maybe a plottwist where Ryoga joins forces with happosai(Happo convinced Ryoga that Ranma is of the "sorts of ne'er-do-wells)" review 4/5 |
![]() ![]() ![]() For some reason this idea is far funnier than it has any right to be... I guess it just has something to do with the fact that it's most definitely original, and that's always a major plus. A bit of advice - a lot of the time you're just going back and forth with the dialogue, you might want to put in a bit more descriptive text to immerse the reader in the story more. Rapid-fire conversations do have their place, but a lot of what's written here would read much better if it were fleshed out a bit. Your characterisations of the cast are pretty good - Ryouga's little thought about that 'honest disgust that girls like' was bang on, and Ranma recklessly messing with Ryouga's head without considering the consequences was also quite appropriate. I'm a little worried about Akane though... her preoccupation with 'defending the city's underwear' indicates she's following in the Grandmaster of Anything Goes' footsteps a little too closely... Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing what trouble 'the Uberman' and his sidekick can get into in future chapters, so good luck with this fic! |
![]() ![]() ![]() brilliant! i loved it. keep writing this one, i think it's going somewhere good :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() hehe, cute. Hope you continue this story. |
![]() ![]() All I can say is... Oh brother. keep it up |