Reviews for A Gem In Our Midst
Minty-Fivestar chapter 23 . 6/12/2004
Hmm... well... I'm feeling a critique coming along...

Ok. First things first. I really, honestly think that we need to get off this "Arinia sick and weak in the hospital" curve. It's starting to get old, I'm afraid to say, and just dragging it out longer and longer is killing the storyline... I don't believe Arinia would really be that sick for that long, especially because nothing that terrible really happened to her. Ok, she was deprived of food a little bit, but by now I think she would be fine, unless she was a REALLY fragile person or something... but then, I wouldn't think she'd go out on a Pokemon journey in the first place.

I think I mentioned once before to let a romance be spread out through the story... but it shouldn't sacrifice the pacing of the rest of the story. I really would like to help you improve this story-I'm always learning new things to improve my own writing from reading what others have written, and what they tell me in reviews. If you'd like some ideas on what exactly I mean by... the above, you can go ahead and ask me. I'd tell you more, but it's like 11:00 at night... Z...

Anyways, keep up the good work! _ See ya later...

-Samantha McPhoenix (aka Pichu*Star)
Minty-Fivestar chapter 22 . 4/2/2004
Sorry I didn't review this right away...
Well, looks like Maxie's trying to make trouble again. Hope he fails miserably.
I seem to be running short on words today... I can't think of anything to say... So instead I'll just say to please update soon. See ya later!
-Samantha McPhoenix (aka Pichu*Star)
PS: Is your other fic "Forever Willing" a sequel to this?
xLOTUSx chapter 15 . 3/15/2004
I think we have different definitions of a laptop.
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 14 . 3/13/2004
Wow. Powerful.
LoTuS
p.s.
I have to do homework and practice Cello, so I'm callin the reading quits for today.
xLOTUSx chapter 13 . 3/13/2004
Maxie is evil. Nuff said.
xLOTUSx chapter 12 . 3/13/2004
Hmm... What was in those shots?
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 11 . 3/13/2004
Wow. The kissing scene was a bit cliche, but all else was good. ON TO THE NEXT CHAPPIE!
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 10 . 3/13/2004
Oer. Short chappie, but very good. Mark is so loyal... sigh... *Lotus smacks her own boyfriend on top of his head*
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 9 . 3/13/2004
Aw... Maxie must die. Maxi must die.
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 8 . 3/13/2004
Yay! *gets popcorn*
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 7 . 3/13/2004
His...
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 6 . 3/13/2004
NO! NOT THE MUDKIP!
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I do sort of wonder what the trap would have been, though... Oh well. Maxie's not going to try to...? Oer. Curse my dirty mind.
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 5 . 3/13/2004
Aww... Poor Arinia... DON'T STEP INTO THE LIGHT!
LoTuS
xLOTUSx chapter 4 . 3/13/2004
Its great so far. Can't wait to read the next one! Well, off to read it I go!
LoTuS
Mal chapter 22 . 2/25/2004
yeahyeahyeahyeahyeah good story keep going! _
Mal the unidentified flying object
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