|Reviews for Fighting The War|
| Elimon chapter 1 . 8/26/2003
Nice twist with the story. Master your writing style and make the chapters longer, then you'll have something.
| Monroe Smith chapter 1 . 8/14/2003
Good storyline so far, and very good description, but when Joey called ken on the phone, in the next paragraph it said that Tony's voice sounded upset. Another thing, you might want to give some insight and description towards Ken Hawke. Like, what does he look like, how did he end up working for the Mafia, and maybe even his background. That way your readers can get to know the character better, and maybe connect ith the character, therefore making the story more enjoyable. The first chapter was good, but you might want to make the next chapters a little longer, that way you can add more stuff, and make the plot deeper.