|Reviews for During a journey in the dark|
| Raxl chapter 3 . 4/1/2004
I have kept up with your story but failed to review on the second chapter. I reviewed on the first (or maybe it was second) chapter under the pen name Elfling, but as you can see I have just adopted a new alias.
Continuing on, I completely adored this chapter. I loved the small things in this chapter, such as your amazing details, your ominous mood of the story, and for some reason when Legolas told Gandalf that he could not see... I don't know why I love that piece of dialogue, but I do.
I would have loved to see another warg attack when the Legolas, Aragorn, Boromir, and Gimli were still blind. It'd be great if you put them through some greater peril with the wolves. I would adore the grim situation.
I was getting ready to give you a large chunk of complaints about the late update, but I had no clue that you were sick! I hope that you get better and will be boisterous on your feet once again. Get better soon, and good luck with the next chapter!
| Aislynn Crowdaughter chapter 3 . 4/1/2004
Sorry to hear that you were ill in earnet! I am glad to hear that you are better again, and I hope that no relapse will be upcoming!
This is a wonderful new chapter. I love the way you give the different viewpoints of the fellowship members; Boromirs view of the aftermath of the fight is very well written and gives quite some insights into his character, and I love the way you have him see (and interact) especially with Aragorn. I like his dry and slihtly cynical musings, the trademark of a warrior used to the field and a proven soldier: "'at least he could hae warned us!' Boromir groused" , and the later passage where he suspects somebody within the fellowship has severely offended one of the Valar - I can see him muttering like this to himself very well.
But I really like the idea that Boromir shares a little (although not that much) of Foresight, and therefore can well understand Aragorns dread of going into the mines! It makes him and Aragorn more akin, and it shows grat insight. I like the way you give more depth to this often neglected character, and I love the way you manage to get into his head. You make me actually like him (and I never got much simpathy for that character before; I don't know, why, he simply didn't touch me).
Aragorn seems to be deeply into denial indeed if he tries to explain the vanished warg bodies and undemolished arrows of the elf with Legolas missing his target and the wargs consuming their own. Even if he would have reason to sudenly doubt the archery skills of the elf, simple logic would tell him that there was simply not enough time for the surviving wargs to take away all the bodies after Gandalfs little fire-show, especially without leving any tracks of dragging them away. But I like the fact that he and Legias and Boromir are conferring about his vision, and that he choses to share it with them. He seems more willing to accept that he may be erring and that their opinion is of value, now.
And I like Sams and Frodos point of view! The dscription of the gloomy lake is thrilling indeed and gives well the eerie mood the dead, unmoved water creates, and Aragorns and Legolas quite conversation is full of forebording.
Yes, a great chapter indeed! Thank you! I hope you will recover soon (and give us the next one...)
Greetings to you,
| chip chapter 3 . 4/1/2004
Sh** Girl, keep writing! It is VERY good! :)
| Alexa chapter 3 . 3/31/2004
I adore this fic and am SO happy it has been updated!
One complaint- more Legolas and Gandalf!
Not really a complaint so much as a command- ahem- request?- lol.
Moria draws ever closer! Legolas' part of the journey should prove...interesting. Poor elf- kept away from the trees and the stars...
Ai! I do not look forward to reading of Gandalf's "death" though! No matter how many times i read the Fellowship it STILL gets me.
| Cloud-123 chapter 3 . 3/31/2004
yay! an update! whoo-hoo! o! evil squid thingys and wargs! please update again soon!
| Bell-Dell chapter 3 . 3/31/2004
Wow...You're very talented! I read the prequel 'While the ring went south' too, and I was really amazed! This is so good!
| Musicstarlover chapter 3 . 3/31/2004
Huh? What do you mean: It didn't work out this time? Of course it did! Heck, I've seen some people who only update every half year! You are not: not prompt. I think that this is giving you the best possible time to make the best possible chapter, and I don't think that it matters in how much time you post it. (although continuing soon is a nice treat)
So THANKS FOR THE UPDATE AND PLEASE CONTINUE SOON!
| Rose Sared chapter 3 . 3/30/2004
And once again you manage to illuminate and make even more enjoyable the bookverse we love and struggle with (if you write anyway).
I do enjoy the dialogue you have such an accurate ear. Sorry to hear of your illness, I hope you stay well, lots of good thoughts coming your way from movie middle earth.
| Firnsarnien chapter 3 . 3/30/2004
Oh my! I'm glad you're feeling better! I know what you mean, at least a little, by being sick and flat on your back! :( Pneumonia can do that to you, as I found out! And it seems to take *forever* to get back to your normal self! But, I *am* glad you are back though I must admit, I did think you'd abandoned this story. I'm so glad I was wrong!
Great chapter! So many wonderful gap fillers here, I can't even begin to name them all! *sigh* Loved the tense anxiety they all felt near that foul lake! Loved the sorrow Frodo and Gandalf feel at having to let loose Bill. Loved Leggy's anger at Aragorn for thinking he'd missed his shot. Loved Boromir's confusion and exasperation at being "out of the loop" when it came to Aragorn's feelings of Moria. Loved the way you captured Sam's mind so perfectly in this chappy! Loved the little arguments Pip and Merry have. Love the weariness Frodo feels as well as the intense nausea at crossing the foul waters. I just love everything! You captured everyone so perfectly in this story, right down to the personality of their socks! LOL
Can't wait for more and take care of yourself so you stay well! :) Relapses are no fun! :(
| SilverWolf7 chapter 3 . 3/30/2004
Have read While the Ring Went South and enjoyed it, so decided to read this. It's good.
Hope you feel better. I know how you feel. For months, I was sick with a lung infection...I couldn't work on my stories as my brain seemed to be fried from lack of sleep...hm.
Ah well, continue on whenever you can.
| Frodo3791 chapter 3 . 3/30/2004
*drops torch and pitch fork and replaces it with 'get well soon message'* I'm glad you updated, and I hope for the best for you on your road to recovery.
I really enjoy this story, as I enjoy all of your writings. You delve into the fellowship fantastically and give me a new appreciation of all the characters. Frodo's decision to stay walking with Gandalf and Gimli rather than join in the bit of mirth behind him really shows how Frodo is changing. He understands his duty and what everyone is laying on the line so that he can succeed. Letting Bill go is another example of that. His view on things was probably the most intriging of them all, though, I enjoy all the character's points of views that you create. They fit so well with the characters too! Great work. Glad to see this back.
| wellduh chapter 3 . 3/30/2004
Did you replace a chapter? Does it just take a while to show up? The summary says chapter 3 is up, but I can only find reviewer responses there. Not that those aren't important. ;)
| Musicstarlover chapter 2 . 3/16/2004
I've just read your prequel to this story and finished this chapter of this story and I have to say that this is one amazing story. SO PLEASE CONTINUE SOON!
| o-Vana-o0 chapter 3 . 3/9/2004
Thought I'd drop a quick review in the hope that it will motivate you to post again...soon.
Drew first got me hooked on 'While the Ring Went South', and I've loved it ever since. It's given me new insight into the Fellowship's mind, which comes in *really* handy when I'm writing my own stories. You are an inspiration to me. Thought it might help you to know that.
| rabidsamfan chapter 2 . 3/8/2004
This is wonderfully absorbing. I'm looking forward to the next chapter quite a bit. You do an elegant job of retelling and expanding on the book.