|Reviews for The Catalyst|
| artseblis chapter 25 . 9/25/2011
I love the complexity of this world, the intrigues and the politics making it richly textured. Jareth as a character is three-dimensional, cruel yet deeply loyal to his cause (or maybe ambitions). Sarah needs work though. She is passive most of the time. There are brilliant bouts of the heroine in her, but most of the time she just sits there waiting for things to happen-so I must echo Bran's sentiments - "what does Jareth see in her?" I think Jareth sees beauty and fire, only the story has not fleshed her out that properly yet.
So sorry you can't continue this. I was riveted, and now I'll never know what happens next. What a tragedy.
| Isaha chapter 25 . 11/3/2009
May I cast a critical eye on this story? I don't know if you will read my review but maybe this can help you for any future writing.
First, I'd like to say that I like your style. It's smooth and flowing most of the time, a real pleasure to read.
However, there are some big flaws in this story (please don't consider this as flame ! I mean no offence). Are you used to write the major plot and twists of a story on a notebook? That's very useful and allows us not to have the hated writer's block.
Now, about The Catalyst... what is at stake is the fact that Toby has been once again taken away, right? But it took 8 chapters to get there... it's far too long. Of course the current political situation (and all its risks) had to be explained, now again you spent too much time explaining this. It doesn't get boring, but it wasn't that useful for the story - writing a prequel, like you did, was a very good idea and should have been enough to get to the point.
But still, I thought it was quite confusing - Jareth had been exiled by Aethan for unknown acts (actions against his brothers? but then why did they agreed to form an alliance with him?), therefore his father forced him to live a rough life BUT Jareth (who craves for power, all the while being pretty headstrong and rebel) still cares deeply for him.
Plus, his character and Bran are quite equivocal concerning Sarah - their behaviours during the ball made me suspect they had been (are?) lovers, all the more since the way Jareth acted towards Sarah at that moment wasn't particularly gentle... he treated her quite harshly during the dance. But he IS infatuated with her...
I'm stopping here. Please don't feel offended ! It is not my intention :(
| Anonymous chapter 25 . 4/21/2009
I am very sorry you are lacking further inspiration for your story. It is quite, as I sit here thinking and drinking in the remants of this tale, breath-taking, well-rounded, fantastical adventure. There are so many other words I would love to describe this story, but I would fill the screen, (I exaggerate, but I would if I could). They really don't write stories like anymore. Again, a wonderful story.
| misssilivren chapter 2 . 3/22/2009
I love and hope you continue it but...Sarah's eyes are green. Not blue.
| magialuna chapter 25 . 2/17/2009
This story is so incredibly good. I truly pray you decide to come back to it, I would really love to see the ending. It is so very different than most Labyrinth stories that are out there. It is very sad to see it stop before Jareth and Sarah have worked out their relationship and before Toby is saved... and without any real knowledge of what the prophecy is or was. So, I will plead for more despite your note that you are abandoning it; hoping that perhaps with a little time you have become less bored with it and perhaps inspired. -Clare
| Queen Grapefruit chapter 1 . 10/5/2008
Wow, this is such a great first chapter, I can't wait to read the rest...even if it's discontinued!
| ShadoweGoddess chapter 25 . 7/1/2008
You discontinued this story!
| FromMyBackyard chapter 25 . 6/1/2008
Having re-read this story for the umpteenth time, prompted by a listing from dansemacabre at the fangirl_tour LJ community, I must say...
I don't care what you have or don't have. If you deem it okay to ramble on for another 30 chapters, I don't give a damn. I will continue to read for eternity.
I've been drawn back tonight, into this wonderful world you've created with intrigue and mystery, political posturing and games, wondering 'will they or won't they?'
Do they save Toby or not? Do they avoid war or battle for ages? What about the prophecy? What is that all about? Do we see it come to pass or not?
While I'm incredibly sad to see all your 2nd characters killed off (Aethan, Owen, Caede - you are dearly cherished and dearly missed), I'm even sadder that the DPB have left you high and dry when it comes to this glorious fic. It has always been my inspiration when I needed something to sink my teeth into. (That and excellent red wine doesn't hurt, either.)
Bless you for what you have so far and consider me *squeeing* in ecstacy if the story gods should grant you more of this. As is, I'm feeling horribly bereft and empty. Just as I would imagine Jareth feels about his father.
And thank heavens his brothers banded with him, and not against him. That would be U-GLY.
Hooray for Sarah being a grown-up and Hooray for you not focusing everything on her when she shows up.
Now I must reluctantly part ways...for a time...and follow up with 'Dark Labyrinth' by Helen Fayle, the story that prompted me to do my own fanfics (w. sff people/ hsfayle/ ). It's incomplete on FF, but she has the full posted there. The only fic that compares to yours and two of the best stories I've ever read.
*bows* THANK YOU.
| Xaviere Jade chapter 25 . 3/20/2008
DO NOT WANT!
This is one of the best, the one I thought, if any, could boot FoD and share its glory. It makes me sad, because this story has always been one of the most inspiring ones to read as I write. But on the other hand, I do, grudgingly, understand.
| Fenikkusuken chapter 25 . 2/21/2008
*growl* You finally bring Sarah's character to the point where I have an inkling of hope that she's possibly grown up enough to handle Jareth with some finesse... and you discontinue the fic. Mou.
I understand when the bunnies go AWOL; I hope that you will continue to write in your other fandoms.
| sweetbabby33 chapter 25 . 2/20/2008
An update from u make me very happy,but the AN from u make me sad...Anyway i hope u'll find inspiration to continue it again in wishes to u and i hope u'll write JS fic again soon.U're still my FAV! n_n
| notwritten chapter 25 . 2/19/2008
Good chapter, enjoyable. Do not give up on your story please. So keep smiling, and have a good day tomorrow. :-)
| dansemacabre chapter 25 . 2/19/2008
I was very sorry to hear you've discontinued the story, as it is one of my all-time favorites at FFnet, but I understand the situation you're in. Sometimes a story just seem to want to move anywhere, despite an author's poking and prodding. It's frustrating as hell, and difficult to step away.
Best wishes, and I look forward to seeing other writings from you in the future. You're way too talented for even a massive case of writer's block to stop you completely. :)
| ShadowyLined chapter 25 . 2/19/2008
Your situation is understandable and familiar (at least to me). It can become virtually impossible to feel motivated to continue or finish a story. Maybe one day you'll feel differently, but until then... this is a story. It's a work of fiction that you have submitted for readers to enjoy but at one time you enjoyed it as well. If you no longer enjoy it, well, that's just the way the cookie crumbles. If you do get any complaints, reviewers railing against you for leaving this unfinished, take it with less than a grain of salt. It happened to me recently, and it pissed me off. I was far more appreciative of the many supportive reviewers who had a decent attitude about the whole thing. For cripes sake, this isn't a job. Writers don't get compensated for fan fiction.
| hazlgrnLizzy chapter 25 . 2/19/2008
I find it sad that you cannot come up with any other ideas for this story, but I thank you for a most enjoyable read!
Maybe in time the idea will come, or you will be inspired too create another story!
Again thank you for an excellent story!