|Reviews for Entry one: First arena fight|
| Forohe Toxophilus chapter 2 . 5/30/2007
Well, a bit anti-climatic, and rather uninteresting battle scenes, but I award you for your persistance at trying to get better. This chapter was better than the last. But one thing about Chpt 1. Its the Railgun, not the Raingun. And people are usually very tense in the arena, so its hard to sneak up on someone.
Keep up the good work!
| Forohe Toxophilus chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
Well, you obviously are a decent writer, with a good plot, but some grammatical errors. And, you need to put some emotion into the dialouge between charicters, like
"Why wont you die!" roared Wrack at the two opposing gladiators.
But other than that, good plan!
| silverr wingg chapter 1 . 11/27/2003
Hey Mr. HS. Wee-oo! That was nifty-ness maximized. Do they really bleed? (half of me shudders while half of me smiles). Way to go.