|Reviews for Learning As We Go|
| darkpheonix31 chapter 8 . 6/25
Wait Snape is the only person that's been honest with Harry by telling him he an arrogant attention seeker? That has shown no regard for Harry or his feelings? If that doesn't mess with Harry's self esteem nothing will. Remus basically just told him that the only person that is consistently cruel to him is the only one being honest.
| darkpheonix31 chapter 7 . 6/25
You have a good writing style but Snape and Harry are so far out of character it's hard to fully enjoy the development of their relationship. Harry is too fragile and terrified, Snape is too understanding and kind. In an attempt to show Snape as a father figure you've strayed from both and treated them unfairly in your depictions. Snape is cruel and bitter- it's who he is. However, the man has shown that he can be capable of caring for someone if he truly feels them worthy.
He loved Lily because he respected her but all your giving him to have for Harry is pity.
You seem to be using a canon universe up until 6th year so why the drastic character change is Harry? Harry could still suffer from the loss of Sirius as well as the treatment of his uncle without making him appear weak and rather pathetic. One of the great appeals of Harry is the strength that he has in spite of all his troubles- why discredit him but giving him no coping skills? Why ignote the fact that Snape is kind of the worst choice to care for Harry becauae he lacks interpersonal skills amd compassion. The illness in the story drew me in because it gave a logical reason why it was SNAPE that was needed to care for him (with his knowledge of potions) rather than the far better choice of McGinagall to look after him as he recovered from emotional problems. Why take someone obviously traumatized and force them to stay with a person that has shown them nothing but contempt for 5 years? The challenge with fan fiction is fitting reactions with established characters as they have been created as opposed to original fiction where you can create what you want. Sorry for the length bit if I give a criticism I like to fully explain why. The story is good and you are definitely talented
| amb6675 chapter 34 . 4/14/2016
More please would love more chapters.
| Guest chapter 34 . 4/14/2016
I love this story please write more chapters. I want to read more
| GothDyke chapter 34 . 4/9/2016
I really like what you have written so far.
This story has many elements that I love in particular: Harry having pet snakes; the pets themselves being protective of Harry; giving him magical senses and power without making him into a super-hero; the Dursleys getting a real trial (contrary to violent retribution by Snape/others); Draco turning to the Light; Snape and Lupin trying to get along for Harry's sake...
The only point of criticism that I have is the poor spelling because it disrupts the reading flow. I had to read some sentences for a second or third time trying to figure out what your meaning is. So I would suggest getting a beta-reader.
And maybe the beta-reader has suggestions that help you with your writer's-block. I really hope that you will be able to finish this some day.
| juliana chapter 34 . 4/4/2016
I love this story ! Update soon please ! Biz
| band122005 chapter 34 . 3/15/2016
Loving this story! I know that it's been quite awhile since the last update, but please consider updating soon! What happens next?!
| Innana chapter 6 . 3/7/2016
Sevie has a kitty cat, squee!
| Innana chapter 4 . 3/7/2016
Ok, so I should have waited before reviewing the last chapter! I'm glad Petunia is concerned about Harry. I always thought that at some point, she must have taken care of him because he was a baby when she first took him in. Vernon is just awful. I would have liked to have seen him locked up!
| Innana chapter 3 . 3/7/2016
Not so much a flame as a tiny spark but - wouldn't Petunia recognize Severus from when he was friends with Lily? I don't imagine that Snape is a name one would forget. Otherwise nicely written. I wouldn't mind Sev doing my garden!
| Guest chapter 3 . 3/7/2016
Having read the reviews I hope this doesn't turn into slash cos that stuff is shite and everyone asking for SS/HP you are sick in the head! If this is mentor type stuff I shall read as enjoying it so far, if it turn slashy, I'm out of here - no exceptions!
I guess I might peek ahead now ;-)
| skyeza chapter 34 . 9/14/2015
Bloody brilliant, totally loving Snape in this. Please continue with updating this amazing story, we need you to complete it. First story of yours I've read, excellent start, but needs to be finished with at least a dozen more chapters. Love it
| Guest chapter 34 . 8/10/2015
Pretty please tell me your still updating this story and soon. I really like it and hope you will continue it soon please.
| Sophie chapter 34 . 5/26/2015
WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW AMAZING! PLEASE UPDATE, THIS STORY IS TOO GOOD TO LEAVE! XXX
| Sophie chapter 14 . 5/26/2015
Oh god I love this story its just so amazing and I love the way you write! xxx