Reviews for The Family Name |
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![]() ![]() ![]() The overall writing was good. But here's what I found lacking : 1) Artemis wasn't portrayed properly. Not at all. Not one bit. 2) His ace against the basilisk was a bit weak. 3) The reason he went to the Malfoy Manor was weak. And while it was a good addition , it was unnecessary. Also why wasn't the entire LEP involved ? They were for Fowl. 4) While this is more of a ' me ' problem. I don't think Artemis fits on the Harry Potter universe. Code Geass is perhaps a better option 5) The whole Fowl/Malfoy rivalry. It doesn't make sense. I can imagine Draco being a stuck up brat but not Fowl. Not even when he's 12. 6)Finally. A lot of excess information. I had to skip a few paragraphs so that the story would proceed. Now what I liked : 1) Frankly , it was refreshing to see things from Malfoy's perspective. 2) Generally well written and easy to read. 3) The fact that it's completed. |
![]() ![]() i dont really care its not artemis/draco slash bc honestly they wouldn't work well together anyway but the fuck you mean "don't worry, they're straight!"? like? ok bitch why cant i find one (1) artemis fowl/harry potter crossover that isn't homophobic tbh |
![]() ![]() ![]() About the Malfoys being known to Ravenclaw, the first Malfoy arrived in Britain in 1066, after the founding of Hogwarts so I don't believe that they could be related somehow. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Six chapters in and now I have to leave a review. I'm loving it. I just did a 9 book reread binge after trying to watch that awful movie. Jumping to fanfiction right after made me realize that Artemis is very hard to write. I think you've done an excellent job. He's not quite like the books. But I can imagine him being like this after meeting the fairies and being in a situation where he's giving school a chance. You've done a good job keeping him believable. |
![]() ![]() fucking shit |
![]() ![]() It’s okay but Artemis is really ooc prolly because you need him to be that way so the story doesn’t end to quickly it’s kinda getting on my nerves |
![]() ![]() Harry says: Why on earth would someone like Malfoy. Ron: ? Artemis: Thank you, author. Draco: WHY ON EARTH WOULD I LIKE FOWL? Zabini:... WHY DO PEOPLE WANT THIS? |
![]() ![]() Thank you. I'm glad it's not Artemis/Draco. Also, nice job. Are you going to add Theodore Nott in? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Neither second years nor first years take Care of Magical Creatures. I noticed this in the conversation between Artemis and Ginny where someone said that they were studying Bowtruckles. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Neville's grandmother's name was Augusta, not Eunice. I also wanted to ask, why do you sometimes repeat a scene of the previous chapter at the beginning of the next one? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent concept, poorly executed. Allowing the MC to comment that he's acting OOC does not make it okay, just more difficult. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OH MY GOSH! I know I'm overreacting here but like: the day Artemis reports to Hogwarts is actually my birthday! Pretty Ironic right? |
![]() ![]() Could you pair Artemis with Hermione and Draco with Holly? I think that Artemis and Hermione would go well together because their intelligence would work well together, but Hermione's righteousness would keep Artemis in check. While Holly would make Draco loosen up, and if working together, Draco would be the schemer and Holly would be the do-er |
![]() ![]() Artemis is quite out of character. |
![]() ![]() ![]() not gona lie. I agree with Pansy hereXD |