Reviews for The Family Name |
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![]() ![]() Personally I prefer no romance for Temi I prefer karatemaster101's story to this already but meh it will be fine ig |
![]() ![]() ![]() God the characterisations are brilliant, hilarious, and spot on for the AU combo |
![]() ![]() ![]() Everything about this gives gay vibes. Its like the ultimate 'haven't quite figured out they're gay but have a crush' story. (-it is very much appreciated-). (now for the actual review): I really love the characterisation of Malfoy and the Slytherin house in general. I haven't got very far but its great already! thanks for writing this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The overall writing was good. But here's what I found lacking : 1) Artemis wasn't portrayed properly. Not at all. Not one bit. 2) His ace against the basilisk was a bit weak. 3) The reason he went to the Malfoy Manor was weak. And while it was a good addition , it was unnecessary. Also why wasn't the entire LEP involved ? They were for Fowl. 4) While this is more of a ' me ' problem. I don't think Artemis fits on the Harry Potter universe. Code Geass is perhaps a better option 5) The whole Fowl/Malfoy rivalry. It doesn't make sense. I can imagine Draco being a stuck up brat but not Fowl. Not even when he's 12. 6)Finally. A lot of excess information. I had to skip a few paragraphs so that the story would proceed. Now what I liked : 1) Frankly , it was refreshing to see things from Malfoy's perspective. 2) Generally well written and easy to read. 3) The fact that it's completed. |
![]() ![]() i dont really care its not artemis/draco slash bc honestly they wouldn't work well together anyway but the fuck you mean "don't worry, they're straight!"? like? ok bitch why cant i find one (1) artemis fowl/harry potter crossover that isn't homophobic tbh |
![]() ![]() ![]() About the Malfoys being known to Ravenclaw, the first Malfoy arrived in Britain in 1066, after the founding of Hogwarts so I don't believe that they could be related somehow. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Six chapters in and now I have to leave a review. I'm loving it. I just did a 9 book reread binge after trying to watch that awful movie. Jumping to fanfiction right after made me realize that Artemis is very hard to write. I think you've done an excellent job. He's not quite like the books. But I can imagine him being like this after meeting the fairies and being in a situation where he's giving school a chance. You've done a good job keeping him believable. |
![]() ![]() fucking shit |
![]() ![]() It’s okay but Artemis is really ooc prolly because you need him to be that way so the story doesn’t end to quickly it’s kinda getting on my nerves |
![]() ![]() Harry says: Why on earth would someone like Malfoy. Ron: ? Artemis: Thank you, author. Draco: WHY ON EARTH WOULD I LIKE FOWL? Zabini:... WHY DO PEOPLE WANT THIS? |
![]() ![]() Thank you. I'm glad it's not Artemis/Draco. Also, nice job. Are you going to add Theodore Nott in? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Neither second years nor first years take Care of Magical Creatures. I noticed this in the conversation between Artemis and Ginny where someone said that they were studying Bowtruckles. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Neville's grandmother's name was Augusta, not Eunice. I also wanted to ask, why do you sometimes repeat a scene of the previous chapter at the beginning of the next one? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent concept, poorly executed. Allowing the MC to comment that he's acting OOC does not make it okay, just more difficult. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OH MY GOSH! I know I'm overreacting here but like: the day Artemis reports to Hogwarts is actually my birthday! Pretty Ironic right? |