|Reviews for Once upon a faerytale|
| Writingaddict169 chapter 5 . 7/16/2010
It's a good story, but it's hard to understand who's talking when and to whom. Maybe in future stories, you could make it clearer such as adding names or describe something about that character. For example if you were talking about Mallory in this story, you could say, the red-headed knight turned to her queen and said to her... Just a suggestion. Love the story though ;)
| DevLeigh chapter 11 . 9/9/2004
Hey! How's it going? I thought you'd rather have a review before a very long and detailed email as to what's been going on in my life that is boring and completely useless! Anyway, on to the review!
*drum roll* This was fantastic! You've outdone yourself here, my friend! I loved the colorful dialogue and wording, the old atmosphere, the complete package! However, I must go on a rage for a moment! You killed Duke! This man had ties to everyone in the story! Mallory's husband, Wildwing's best friend, as well good friends with Tanya, (okay, not everyone!) not to mention he was so cool! He was the Greatest Knight! I loved his character, and not many people can make me love Duke! I like him all the same, but love! Girl, you have got to do a sequel! Duke has to live again! Okay, joshing is over, but seriously, he was cool, and to fall in battle, there is no greater glory! I loved his scene with Nosedive and Tanya! Where he says, "Welcome back, my prince!" Ah, warm is still poor girl's heart who is back in a frigid school! And where he and Mallory think about running away? I guess everyone has those thoughts about not going back to work, especially when they almost gave their lives for the King and Queen, but...it just made him seen so real! Also, Grin's part was wonderful! He comes in, puts the entire story between Dive and Wing together, and helps to put the two back on the road to brotherhood! Monks, got to love them! And the patch...oh, you are just getting me going! However, Canard dies, too! I was crying, right there! How could you kill him, too? Well, you couldn't be the king, since Wing was such a cool one, but yeah, I will miss him! You gave him a good rap, which I have a story with that, too, but many people think he's evil to Nosedive! But...he actually saved (kinda) the kid's life in the beginning...so...but *cries again*
Anyway, this could go on and on and on, but the main thing I just wanted to point out was this was a great story, and no! Ambrosia was perfect in it! Leave her where she is! The Queen of Puckworld must not leave! She's not a mary-sue, and she's a drag either! She's probably one of the few characters not in the original script that I love! Keep her!
Anyhoo, the story's over now! BOO-HISS! As I said to Divey, you must write again! I want more! I love your stories! Go back to the computer right now!
P.S. I'd love to know what you meant by "Squire Girl." I know that my stories evolve sometimes from things completely different from the ending! I'd love to know how yours did!
P.P.S. I’m sorry for the delay, but you probably won’t get an email from me until at least next week, pending my job. I’m going to find out my hours today, so wish for good ones!
| Miyo86 chapter 11 . 7/21/2004
I am so happy you finished but..but..YOU KILLED DUKE!*Lets out a Charlie Brown scream: ARGH!* Other than that painful moment, I absolutely adored this fic! I'm so happy Tanya had a great part(she tying for 1rst with Duke in my affections : )! Incredibly awesome plot line, and to think,it all started as a lost bet! You did a great job with the no-name dealy _ Good Job!Brava and Encore!
| Raphael chapter 11 . 7/21/2004
Yay! One of my biggest fears when reading a story that's posted sporadically in chapters is that the story will be left on the shelf and never finished.
So glad this wasn't the case here. I've really enjoyed your twist on the Mighty Ducks. Thanks! Great story!
| Silver Elf Child chapter 11 . 7/20/2004
NO I did not enjoy this. I just spent way too much time laughing and rambling on to my friends about this story to enjoy it. (Yes I did enjoy it and envy it, my story will never be this good ( ). I was right! Ha! I am good. Now if K2 will mind stepping down for a bit, I have a bow and a few nocked arrows I must let loose. I dont' use whips I use bows to get people to write more. So... *evil smile* You do know that that means...
SMile, Live, Laugh, Love and God Bless
| Silver Elf Child chapter 10 . 7/20/2004
Wow, I acutally read all of this chapter in one felled swoop. Even with my baby brother whining, 'I want to use the phone'. This was great, never doubt yourself! I'm just sad to see Duke leave. Thanks for the extra side notes they helped understand a few of my questions, but I had one little side note of my own. This kind of sounded like something that would have happened when Drake Ducaine banished the Saurians to 'Eternal Oblivion'. Well I should go. I want more I want more, I want ... more.
Smile, Live, Laugh, Love and God Bless
| Daniella L'orange chapter 11 . 7/19/2004
You are making me cry! You killed Duke! NO! Mallory is widow. My heart is broken! Oh, I liked the idea you mentioned in your email. But I'm glad Ambrosia wasw in the story. She's best original character by far on . I love this story, but Duke & Mal should have had kids and grown old together! Anyway, you're story was a masterpeice of literature. It will always be one of my favorites. Please write more. You will always have this devoted fan.
Love and God Bless,
| silver elf child jin chapter 9 . 7/16/2004
Elfy review. Elfy always does, but must make this short since she's at work...
Me likey. You killed him! How could you kill him! And just for the record Divey poo is not the only one with freckles like that. Canard had the same mark on his beak as well. P.
You're so evil. posting two stories in one week. Where as I haven't picked up a fanfiction pen in weeks. (brain died do to working full time ((and two part time jobs)) and trying to find an appartment). I guess I can get back to writing my story set in medieval times, or I could write some other stuff. Probably not though.
Your writing is awesome and I love to read every bit of it. Too bad I'm not versed as well as you. I have to go. A working womans job is never done.
Smile, Live, Laugh, Love and GOd Bless
| Daniella L'orange chapter 9 . 7/14/2004
THis is wonderful! I love you! Duke/Mal forever! You are my favorite author now! Please update soon! Eagerly await the next chapter!
Love and God Bless,
| Daniella L'orange chapter 8 . 7/12/2004
Very good chapter! Though, I'm upset at Duke and Mallory being killed.I trust you and I'll wait for the next chapter. Please, update soon. I'm addicted to this story.
Love and God Bless,
| Miyo86 chapter 7 . 4/17/2004
"Cousin!" Hehe!_ Wow, a WHOLE lot went on in this chapter! I loved ALL of Duke's scenes this chapter, really great! I also liked Nosedive, hehe He got to steal from Falcone(if i didn't get the descriptions screwed up). I enjoyed this part!
| Perchance to Write chapter 7 . 4/16/2004
Hey! Wow...huh. I have to be honest. This is one of the best stories I have read on . You've developed your characters so perfectly, and it's just so well written. Also, Duke should be at center stage. He is the one that is in charge now that the King is hurt, and you write him so well. You are only the second author to make me actually like him (the other one doessn't even post here); therefore, go for it! Anyway, back on track, I love the way you are going with this, especially now that you've brought the characters together! And Ambrosia (spelling?), you've created a character that is not a mary-sue, and for that, I am truly glad! I love your work, and I can't wait for more!
| Daniella L'orange chapter 7 . 4/13/2004
I love it! Replenishing energy yeah that's why Duke kissed her. Riight, I believe ya. It's great. Keep writing. I beg of you, keep and thanks for mention.
Love and God Bless,
| Silver Elf Child chapter 7 . 4/13/2004
Am I reading you correclty? Did Dive just say he's the cute one? Sure he is, in his own mind.
Okay... Now for my review. I loved it! And just to let you know, I KNEW it was Mal Mal with the bow! Ever fired one of those puppies off? Trust me it's not as easy as it looks. I know, I've tried. So Tanya and Dive are stuck together, Duke and Mal are off raiding the Raptor and Wing just found Canard? Am I correct? Falcone is dead, great, never liked the guy in the first place. So who is this other saurian? I'm a little confused there, but maybe that's becuase I'm craming for immunology and molecular cell biology. Yesterdays lecture said that if you study too much your head will explode. Not really, but if you get the wrong kind of stimulation then you can kill off your brain cells. Maybe that's why I'm getting dumber not smarter? Or maybe I just really need to stop rambling on and on.
Keep writing. It was defiently a treat to read this. Maybe as soon as I'm done with my graduation I might post the first chapter of my medieval story. (fat chance, huh?)
Till the next time you post,
Smile, Live, Laugh, Love and God Bless.
ps. I hope you had a splendid Easter and I LOVED the reference to spirituality here. Pray Nosedive, you're going to need all the help you can get!
| Daniella L'orange chapter 6 . 3/7/2004
I love this story. It's definately one of the best I've ever had the pleasure of reading. One small request though, could you PLEASE add more about Duke and Mallory's past relationship.! I'm a HUGE Duke/Mal shipper and I can never find enough stories on that wonderful pair. Anyway, you're a great writer ; keep up the good work.