|Reviews for Cruel to Be Kind|
| BrownEyes3 chapter 2 . 9/27/2003
I really like this story! I love the movie '10 things I hate about you' and I think this will turn out to be a really good story! Although, I have some suggestions. You have everything clumped up in big paragraphs. Try spacing out your dialouge. For example:
Connor looked at Jesse. "Wait, is that your rule or theirs?"
See, that way it's easier to read and you know who's talking. Click on a couple of other stories to see what I mean. Also, you have a couple grammatical errors. I suggest getting a beta. Someone to look over and revise your work. Also, I noticed you have your reviewers login to review. A lot of people don't review stories that make them login. To change this, in your settings when you login you should unclick the box that says 'login for reviews'. That way, you'll be sure to get more reviews.
With that said, please hurry up and update soon! This si turning out really good so far! -BrownEyes-
| Serene Sue chapter 2 . 9/26/2003
This is really good so far and you need to update soon because of how good it is.