|Reviews for Phoenix|
| GandalfTG chapter 21 . 5/6/2019
Very sad that I only now found this fic. While there was much OOC-ness in the beginning, it was explained, eventually. Good story telling overall though. I also thought that the destruction of the Tendo School was most fitting.
| yfnjustin chapter 1 . 1/13/2019
What the hell is wrong with people make gay fanfic story of Ranma. The dude is a guy why would he falls in love with another guy just because he trapped forever in a boby of a woman. People just don't turn gay for no reason or that fast. Is Story like this the reason why I don't read Ranma 1/2 fanfic that much, they take something that was supposed to be funny Ranma turn in a girl and make like this. This is just wrong to me. The curse was joking in Ranma 1/2 but some reason Ranma is not Ranma is he not curse so they make cures Ranma in many fanfic where he Forever Trapped as a girl or just don't want to get rid of the curse. I out
| Naora91 chapter 21 . 6/27/2018
This was fun to read. I wish there was more though.
| Hikari Nova chapter 21 . 6/8/2018
very nice story *goes to see if there's a sequel or not* also has there been any reading of fics for this?
| Hikari Nova chapter 1 . 6/8/2018
interesting, normally I stay away from fics with self inserts but this caught my interest enough to take a look
| maryjane5000 chapter 21 . 2/1/2015
Great story however I wish it was a little longer before Ranma meet Marxs like a few scenes after Jusenkyo including meeting her mother
Her getting married right off the back is fine but you could have had her slowly accept she's now a full woman or at least wait a little longer before she has sex
| The Keeper of Worlds chapter 21 . 4/1/2014
Well now, that's a twist:). Maybe have Ryoga come in and have learned some crazy tranquil form of martial arts to settle his anger and depression and be like Godfather/sensei to Saburo? Be a cool move:)
| FireInLife chapter 21 . 12/21/2013
I read the first few chapters and skimmed through a few of the others. Probably the biggest problem I see with this is how black and white the story is. When I read this story, I think of how Kuno's thought process works. Take the end result that you want, and then fill in the details to make that result make sense. It's horrible science and makes for awful writing too.
I also think things should have been taken more slowly. Start off with Ranma's original character when he fell into the permanent spring. Show the key events that show how Ranma's changing with the Amazons, but without drastic changes to her character too quickly; character's should grow throughout the entire story after all. Make an excuse for Ranma to stay with Chris for a couple months - Say, proper rest, nutrition, and a home to recover. Develop a growing attraction between Chris and Ranma, and then have Chris propose. Have Chris explain military terminology to Ranma so the readers aren't confused with all the code words.
Granted, this is fan fiction so you should write whatever you want without concern for proper storytelling. There are a fair amount of people that liked how you wrote the story anyways, which is far better than anything I could do. Besides, I did fully read up to chapter 7 so I don't think the story is all that bad. It just could have been a lot better.
| Black Mad Hatter chapter 21 . 9/11/2013
I don't know the goddesses name in Asgard but she had to be really annoyed with him to do that to him.
| ReaderofManyWords chapter 21 . 5/1/2013
Exactly the way i remember it, expertly written. Hopefully the wind will always be beneath your wings.
| Blackholelord chapter 1 . 10/27/2012
Its a nice story, personally it took me a while to find it once again.
| JohnStang chapter 1 . 9/5/2012
I really really loved your story.
My Father was a rear gunner on a B-29 and told me some of his time in the service. The aspect I enjoyed in your story is the marriage of the two genre, Ranma (who I loved watching) and the US Airbase which I loved on count of my Dad (who I had loved dearly).
Your piece in one of the few that I reread on a regular bases.
I wish to thank you from the bottom of my heart for a truly spectacular story.
| Raynze76 chapter 21 . 6/18/2011
a interesting twist to a Ranma fanfic but very enjoyable for one who was a AF brat growing up lol
| tuatara chapter 1 . 6/3/2011
Huh. Right off the bat, there are already a ton of problems with this.
Why would he not take her to the hospital? Okay, she has hypothermia, but she also would need to be assessed for infection, dehydration, malnutrition, and so on. Any type of infirmary would be better able to deal with her than he would.
Then there's this exchange:
'Ranma sighed and began her tale of woe. "This body is the result of an ancient curse. I was born a boy…"
Marx interrupted for a moment. "This would explain the lack of bra and the boxers." She nodded, sheepishly. "Go ahead."'
In what way is his response even remotely logical? Why would he possibly accept such a fantastical claim at face value? He asks no questions about any of it? The springs, the Amazons, none of it? 'Kay.
Also, after establishing that she doesn't know much English and he doesn't know much Japanese, they proceed to communicate with no real problem. Inconsistency, yo.
Then there's the general fanfiction complaint of having Ranma tell his/her life story right off the bat to virtual strangers. It happens in many stories, but it's something that just doesn't fit well with Ranma's personality.
Oh, and there's also the fact that Ranma repeats what was already explained about her past in the opening narration. So it really should have been cut from the very beginning of the story.
But of course the big one is the whole marriage thing. Now, I'll even put aside the fact that there really are other options for Ranma than marrying some guy. But they've literally only known each other for a matter of minutes! I know it's impossible for Ranma's life to be sane, but *that's* just nuts.
'"Chris," she said, almost as if she was savoring the way the unfamiliar word sounded to her ears.' - Seriously? Oy.
'Marx smiled at her. "Ranma, I wouldn't be suggesting this if I wasn't willing to be your husband."' - Maybe it's just me, but I don't think most people make it a habit to propose to someone they met only a few minutes earlier. (And yeah, it's hours after he found her, but that doesn't count because she was unconscious all that time.)
There are also other smaller things like what happened to Genma, how Ranma found out about her mother, how she convinced Nodoka that she was Ranma, and so on. But those are minor compared to the other stuff.
I enjoy a good "Ranma-chan falls for a dude" story more than just about anyone, but this is extremely silly stuff. However, I'm apparently going to continue reading this anyway. Because I'm like that.
| skywiseskychan chapter 21 . 10/22/2010
While strikingly abrupt at points and feeling a bit OOC still I have enjoyed reading this story. Something about the pacing has just been enjoyable and of course I'm a sucker for catgirls and fighterjets. I hope you decide to continue it some day.