|Reviews for Fortress Around The Heart|
| E chapter 14 . 11/22/2016
Joan is acting like a bitch.
| E chapter 5 . 11/22/2016
I would've told him that I was "healing from a bad relationship" and to "go fuck off, bitch."
| E chapter 3 . 11/22/2016
She is prettier than Estel...
| E chapter 26 . 11/21/2016
Awwww...He woves her! _
| Guest chapter 26 . 12/16/2015
Good story up until that B dude came in. No offense or anything like that, but you could've had such a beautiful story. He just ruined it and made this another, "man why did I read this fic?" Seriously though, great freaking story until that elf came in.
| laura793 chapter 22 . 2/22/2015
I hate Irulan! Hate her! She has to be the most selfish childish inconsiderate character, not to mention stupid; for her current actions can be described as none other.. no slight on you as a writer, the story as it's written is fantastic and I'm loving it so far but I just want to punch her in the face!
Fingers crossed that as I keep reading she sorts her shit out!
| Saltwater chapter 7 . 2/20/2015
I'm not sure how to feel about the relationship you are building for these two. There's something enticing about Legolas's possessiveness and the high-handed nature in which he just takes charge of Irulan... But at the same time, you are toeing a difficult line between a dominant man, and a manipulative one. I feel like this is erring on the side of danger - he HAS kidnapped her, against her will, she did not join him excited at the adventure, she was literally pushed and dragged along, and stated several times she wanted to go back. He has made sure to put her in a situation where she is completely dependant on him, with no way to get home if she chooses to, or even any money at her disposal. She has felt physically threatened by his anger several times. She continues to deny his advances but he keeps pushing himself on her, using emotionally manipulative tactics to get her to comply and give in to him even as she does so with obvious discomfort... I feel uncomfortable with the romantic light you are depicting all of this in. If I was in this situation, dragged against mt will to a foreign country with a man who had complete control over my ability to get home, who was pushing unwanted physical contact in me, becoming intimidatingly angry at my rejection, refusing to allow me to go home and in fact forcing me to stay the night with him... I would be legitimately terrified.
I've read this story before, many years ago... Coming back to it now, I feel deeply uncomfortable at how this is unfolding and surprised I didn't notice how intimidating and just... not okay this whole situation is so far.
| ellieloves2read chapter 4 . 1/15/2015
Oh my, this looks like a beginning to a great journey. I have doubts when I first started this story. Consider my doubts squashed!-
| Regin chapter 26 . 1/1/2014
I Like, I Lust, I Love!Please Update Soon!
| Guest chapter 24 . 10/3/2013
You mislead us readers. In the beginning of the story you wrote that Legolas never loved a woman and now your writing that he loved this Bentanta chick. I call bullshit.
| Guest chapter 22 . 10/3/2013
Irulan is worth than Bella Swan.
| Cerebella Kennor chapter 26 . 5/21/2013
I very much enjoyed this story. The plot kept moving and at times it was very exciting to follow along (especially the Rome-Paris-Vienna adventure). The characters were very realistic, though I didn't always like them - hated them and their actions and decisions, in fact - which is why they were so life-like, I wager!
I LOVED the way you so firmly separated Elves from Men, because it is so easy for writers to just assume that they are the same and would act the same in every situation. But they wouldn't, and it was refreshing to read about that, and to read about how very frightening those differences can be!
My only real problem with this story is how often your characters "swallow" in response to emotions. By the time I hit chapter ten, I was laughing every time I saw "s/he swallowed softly". It was a bit hard to take seriously at times since it happened so often. I would suggest exploring different bodily reactions, things like facial expression and body language.
Other than that, it was a great story to read and I was at times very moved. The scene with Arwen being disappointed in her really struck a chord in me, and Baeron's death (and especially the location, manner, and choice of death) was indeed saddening. The Joan of Arc episode was also rather intense... The whole idea of immortal beings living among mortals actually kind of depresses me, and not too many people take up the challenge of displaying the downsides of such an existence. You've done it fairly well.
I must say, though, that Legolas' persistence here in the epilogue is a bit humorous. I feel bad for Irulan - she'll never have a normal life ever again, no matter how hard she tries. And the fact that you didn't end this with an, "...and they lived happily ever after," was wonderful. Real life has problems, and just because the story's over doesn't mean they're all overcome. So, again, it was nice to see something realistic. I also admit that a sad ending where the Elf gave up would not have satisfied me as much as the one you chose.
| Guest chapter 2 . 1/17/2013
legolas is a prick stop trying to say like all girls that elves are better then humans and dwarfs aragorn would own him calling humans weak. and your a human riping off your own race. legolas does not love your OC
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/4/2012
There is such a thing as sexual harassment. When a person of any gender or age says 'no', it means no, continuing the point reaches the point of sexual harassment. The feelings Irulan describes is not different than a victim. This story has reached the point of disgusting that such an event is acceptable.
| littledragoneyes chapter 26 . 6/30/2011
this is a wicked good story! love it!