Reviews for Fortress Around The Heart
guest chapter 24 . 3/18/2021
WHAT THE FUCK! Sooo. Elves get into common old punch ups now... Really!? I mean. REALLY?
I'm sorry, but I've tried to give this story a fair go, and just when I think it cannot get any worse- it just DOES.
Because this shit should not even be classed under the LOTR category anymore. As it simply is not one. Legolas is NOT portrayed as an elf- even an elf who is depressed and given up on the world. And more on that- why does he not just sail to Valinor already if he is so done with being stuck with humans? But of course, none of these simple but important questions EVER gets an answer. Because why would it? We're just the readers.. A love triangle is the laziest possible plot twist you could have dreamed up for this story. So now we are introduced to this 'Betanta' person?! Not long ago were were supposed to believe that Legolas had never had a meaningful relationship before Irulan, but all of a sudden now this woman pops up and the readers are supposed to buy this confused explanation that she was not 'great love', but she wasn't just a 'fling' either? Soooo what exactly was she then? My opinion,(for whatever it's worth) is that you inserted her artlessly into this story, because you had no better ideas. You thought this story could be some kind of 'epic', and were shocked when you realized you had written Legolas and Irulan into a big block. With nowhere interesting to go. And therefore it has descended into the tragic mess it has become.
guest chapter 22 . 3/18/2021
Bloody hell! This ain't really LOTR- more like a soap opera.
But still I can't stop reading...
guest chapter 15 . 3/18/2021
This does smack of Twilight. Specifically the dynamic between Legolas and Irulan. He's manipulative, uses coercive control,
(like Edward) and she's naive and stupid, (like Bella). I'm starting to like Haldir more at this point...Wish HE was her other love interest.:( Aahh well.
guest chapter 6 . 3/16/2021
Your story is excellent- so far. However, my enjoyment is somewhat diminished by it's writing. The word choices are often times strange, or simply inappropriate. Therefore, the meaning is poorly conveyed to the reader. It is the only major letdown I've noticed so far, otherwise the story is readable. Something else I'll point out is the lack of a backstory for Irulina, in should have been explained in the first couple of chapters where she came from, how old she was,etc. It was not.
Therefore, I was left to guess who this character was, with very little idea from the writer. I do in fact pride myself on my imagination and open mindedness (things you asked of us readers) , but I do expect a properly thought out premise,no matter how out-of-the-box the story might be. No excuses for pure laziness on the part of the writer, here.
Guest chapter 24 . 8/6/2020
Started good, became awful Mary Sue Twilight.
Guest chapter 21 . 8/6/2020
She's a disgusting cheater. What is this stupid love triangle...Twilight? Completely ruined this story with that crap.
JTFrost chapter 8 . 6/3/2020
Dude. This story is good stuff. I can't stop reading it.
Anakin chapter 20 . 4/16/2020
I love this story! You've captured human nature so well. I love the balance between Irulan and Legolas, I think it's very realistic and understandable of what we know of elven nature for them to act the way they do and justify their actions as such.
firerosedreamer67 chapter 26 . 3/6/2019
What an interesting story!...The fight for love down the tracks of time!...To deny what is in her heart , to live and yet not!... To put up such walls against it and still fight for what?! Independence ? That will never come ? Such denial! Such will power!..All to gain freedom to live an empty life?!...It is their lot to live thusly, pushing and pulling, gaining and losing until later time runs out...
Astarria chapter 1 . 11/27/2018
I just need to have this in my favorites
Raider-k chapter 26 . 7/31/2018
*Sigh* I have read this story before, more than once. And every time I am struck by your beautiful descriptions and story-telling. Fortress remains one of my all time favs.

So even though I can't leave another signed review, i had to leave you another note, because I read the recent trashy reviews, none of which fairly depict what a lovely romance this fic is.
misleadlegolasfa chapter 5 . 7/3/2018
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Guest chapter 4 . 7/3/2018
very -centric and no warning...
youdondeservtokn chapter 3 . 7/3/2018
i was trying to read a fic lego-centric,no oc-centric...you are trying to atract readers don warning?
well, i hope they say how this fell...more energetic with hope.
youdondeservtokn chapter 3 . 7/3/2018
its rude write a fic about a stranger and dont say-_
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