|Reviews for Saviour Forgotten|
| The Blue Full Moon chapter 1 . 5/19/2013
Poor Harry :''c
| BSolomon chapter 28 . 11/26/2012
You did a Darn good job on this story each chapter you got right to the story I look forward to your next story
| Lumcer chapter 28 . 10/8/2012
Not a bad telling :) glad you finished it! Thanks for the story!
| Evelyn-the-wiccan chapter 28 . 9/16/2012
| onyeama ujunwa chapter 28 . 8/27/2012
that was real nice and interesting. try to spell correctly bt thumbs up!
| Jeanie21 chapter 28 . 5/23/2012
I absolutely loved this story! :) Brilliant plot. :D I especially loved the Aiden part. Bit like what Midnight Blue developed on with her MOM. :D Loved the ending as well! :) Making Harry get charged as guilty for a crime he didn't commit was awesome! And you managed to keep him good all the way through the story.
Only issue I had with your story is that you do what I do when speaking a foreign language (I'm assuming you're not a native English speaker) and miss out words so the odd sentence doesn't make sense. But by jove it was (and still is) a good story and you only made the odd mistake here and there with the language. :) Is a beta someone who checks your work through before you post it? Might be a good idea to get one of your fans who's a native English speaker to become your beta so that everyone can appreciate your fantastic story(ies).
Hope you write a sequel to this if you haven't already!
Thank you so much for writing this! :)
| vgriffin4 chapter 28 . 4/26/2012
YOUR STORY HAS GOOD CONTENT. HOWEVER THE WRITING IS BROKEN AND IN PLACES VERY HARD TO READ AND UNDERSTAND. BUT THE PLOT IS SO VERY GOOD. I DID ENJOY IT AND LOOK FORWARD TO FUTURE WORK. YOU JUST NEED TO LEARN TO WRITE IN BETTER FORM, SO YOU WILL BE UNDERSTOOD. THEN YOU WON'T LEAVE THE READER TRYING TO FIGURE OUT WHAT THE SENTENCE IS SAYING. GOOD LUCK WITH FUTURE WRITINGS. YOU ARE A VERY GOOD STORY TELLER.
| madyashiefan chapter 16 . 1/23/2012
What on earthn is up with your sentence structure? You miss out words and or phrases all the flipping time! Sort it out as it makes it next to impossible to read let alone understand!
| akblake chapter 7 . 1/11/2012
Err, stopped reading at chapter 7 when I couldn't stand the spelling and the (worse) grammar. Spelling is easy to overlook, but when I have to *guess* at what the author means, thanks to entire missing words, it's not even fun to read. Here are a few examples, and even *in* context they don't make sense:
-I will just need a hair from your you would? (A hair from where exactly?)
-I have retrieved your lost is with me in the dungeons. (His lost what: pet skrewt, Harry, sanity?)
-So u care about a piece of HAIR that looks like me, but u were willing to watch the real me get the Dementors Kiss (Netspeak, really? That's not spelling, that's laziness.)
-I just magic. (What? Aside from toddler grammar, does he *use* magic, or *is* magic, or *wants* magic... or just wants this fic to be "magically" handed over to a talented beta?)
| hawkswench chapter 28 . 11/20/2011
For a first time story it was fairly good. No one expects and excellent story the first time out. If anyone does they need to write and publish their story.
I do think you need to re-read and correct some mistakes to this story. Not just spelling mistakes (the Gods know I can't spell or understand the use of grammar, nor am I that interested in learning it.) but it seems that either your brain was going faster then your fingers could type or your machine was slow and left out words to some of your sentences.
| yngoldfogee chapter 28 . 10/11/2011
It's a shame you're not writing any more, I loved this story. There were times though when words - sometimes many I think - were left out of sentences. If you ever decide to edit this and take out the mistakes I'd recommend a beta reader; I'd be willing to do it but I've never joined as I'm not a writer so you wouldn't be able to contact me.
| Ria chapter 28 . 5/21/2011
there are a lot of sentences all throughout this fic that are missing one, or several, key words. It made it very difficult to figure out what was happening so, even though the fic is complete, you might want to just go back and re-read it so that its easier for the next person who comes along to read it.
| Assassin of the Shadows chapter 28 . 5/20/2011
Have not noticed this before... (it's been a long time since I've read your story) you have a LOT of words missing in this story. The only thing I can think of is that I just supplied the words as I read it the first time. You really need to go over this again and edit it; almost every character speaking has some word (or more) missing in their sentences.
| noelnoel chapter 15 . 4/28/2011
Great battle scene, but it kind of got absurd when Ginny kissed Draco in the middle.
But hey, all's fair in love and war in fanfiction. For example, I enjoy a good Harry/Voldemort story, no matter how improbable.
The best thing about this story is the fast-paced action. There is no time to get bored. It's like a dream or stream of consciousness. There are so many creative ideas, perhaps enough for two stories instead of crammed all into one?
The occasional missed word doesn't bother me. Anyone with any sense can complete the sentence in their mind while reading from context. Such as for example- Severus Snape ladled the from the cauldron. Obviously the word potion was meant to be in that sentence, so why get all riled up about it?
| Rori Potter chapter 28 . 4/18/2011
That was brilliant.