|Reviews for The Trail of the Black Star|
| HunnySnowBunny chapter 5 . 10/23/2003
Oh! The last two chapters were a lot of fun. I really liked Tino, the Ex-um. (Very cute with the whole little ex-um!)
Keep it up! _ And I loved the llama coats! _
| Isobel chapter 5 . 10/23/2003
I love this story!
The llama hoods had me doubled over - embarassing really,
since I'm at work trying to read surreptitiously.
Please update soon.
| WITCH LISA chapter 5 . 10/23/2003
Oh, I'm so enjoying the world you dropped these two into! What a terrific setting! I'm curious how the whole romance novel thing will come back into play, however, I'm finding that the characters are so "real" that it doesn't matter.
Keep writing, you have an exceptional imagination!
| Mundungus42 chapter 4 . 10/23/2003
I reloaded Chapter 4 in case anyone else is having trouble viewing it.
Wow, you guys! Thanks for all the comments!
RE: Peru- I've already finished the story, but if you know Cusco well, I may have to recruit you to fact-check the later chapters. There's only so much one can learn from the internet! :)
RE: Women all over Severus: It's actually not a requirement of the challenge, and I'm sorry my authorial choice is interfering with your enjoyment of the story. To play devil's advocate, since the story is almost entirely from Severus's POV, his appeal to women could be all in his head (a'la Kinbote in "Pale Fire"). I'm not saying this is what I intended for the story, but it's a possible way to read it. I hope it helps!
In the meantime, I loaded chapters 4 and 5 last night after excessive grappling with document manager. I will be posting chapter 6 tonight (Thursday) when return to my humble abode (8:00ish Pacific Time).
Thank you all for the wonderful comments! I hope the rest of the story lives up to your expectations.
| eleanoranne chapter 1 . 10/23/2003
I'm very much enjoying this story. It's a little different from the more run-of-the-mill SS/HG and I love the characterizations and the locale. I can't wait to see the rest.
| Ophelia chapter 5 . 10/23/2003
Apart from the general story - which I'm vastly enjoying (especially the subtle trickling through of detail, such as Dumbledore and HG surviving "with most of her friends intact") - I just LOVE the idea of them flying around disguised as llamas!
| JennyRad chapter 5 . 10/23/2003
OOh, I like this story!
| angelina chapter 5 . 10/22/2003
Witty, funny, silly. I'm really enjoying it-thank you for posting! But chapter 4 is missing, at least according to my browser. Arrgh!
| Lynda chapter 3 . 10/22/2003
This is a pretty funny setting and plot for Severus and Harmione to be protrayed but it works well. I think you have the two of them in good character (especially Snape). The only thing I have trouble with is the suggestion that women seem to be attracted to him where ever he goes and that he has all these romantic interludes but I understand that it is part of the plot challange so I am ignoring it. I love the banter you provide between the characters! It is believable and makes them seem quite real.
| F75 chapter 3 . 10/22/2003
very interesting. if you need some info about Peru, don't hesitate to ask me...
| mavidian chapter 3 . 10/22/2003
I would gladly indulge a story like this The sophisticated, intelligent bantering is reward enough. Dead on character wise, too. Thanks for writing.
| HunnySnowBunny chapter 3 . 10/22/2003
O! This sounds like it could become another one of my favorites.
Hermione...an Amazon? I laughed so hard...and yet...I can see it. I don't know why...but I Can. Besides...if anyone could handle a snarky Potions Porfessor...it's a know-it-all amazon!
I can't wait for more, and hope that you do update on a regular basis as you've said you would! _
| sweetevangeline chapter 3 . 10/22/2003
This story is actually really fab - attention to detail, good storytelling and Amazon!Hermione. *grin* I'm surprised no one's talking about it, but regardless... I hope you'll update sooner rather than later.
| Kngtzgrl chapter 3 . 10/22/2003
Your Author's Note at the beginning caught me by surprise. I literally did a double take when I read it! LOL. :D
I like the back and forth 'arguing' between Hermione and Severus. That was very well written. And that CHUMP sounds delicious!
Keep the chapters coming! "K"
| La Rose Noire chapter 3 . 10/22/2003
Oh, my. Hermione grows up top be Lara Croft...interesting AND amusing take on the character(s). Rarely has an ethical discussion been so funny! I look forward to reading the rest of the story!