|Reviews for Battle Angel Alita: The Novel|
| DarkfictionComa chapter 1 . 3/19
Seriously...this is amazeballs! You are an awesome writer. Keep it up, please.
| DaisukeIsMyHero chapter 1 . 7/23/2013
Hey! This is great! You have a real talent for writing. I read it all and I only found a couple of small oversights. If you want to make it absolutely perfect, I can give you editing advice. Firstly, the word 'it's' which you've used for the possessive doesn't take an apostrophe. Secondly, when Alita asks Ido, "Are you sure you're all right?" I'm sure he says something to the cyborg he's working on, ignoring her question... which is what prompts her to think he's evading her. You can take these suggestions on board, or not, it's still awesome. I like the background you've given the tattooed arm girl; very detailed! I really had the feeling I was living in the Scrapyard. More please!
| Gavin chapter 1 . 10/15/2012
continue this it is an amazing idea.
I think you might go insane once you get to moterball.
| FrozenOnyxPhoenix chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
Are you planning on updating? i seriously hope so as thi is one of the few B.A.A/Gunnm stories here, and the only good one.
| Blacksword Zero chapter 1 . 5/10/2009
| Infragreen chapter 1 . 3/1/2009
This is Gold!
Even as a novel, but I'd like to narrate it both in English and Danish. Make it an audio book!
You convey both the action and the emotions both accurately and powerfully.
Contact Yukito Kishiro and his publisher to get a definite permission to go ahead with the transcription.
| Josh chapter 1 . 2/16/2008
I am a long time fan of this amazing manga... as a matter of fact , it is the specific one that got me reading manga in the first place. You may not see this, but if you do I urge you to continue.
I think you made a great start and should write more. I know there
are other BAA fans out there that would and have appreciated this story.
| morromotherofwolves chapter 1 . 3/28/2007
i dont know if you'll read this or see it but that was outstanding i realy liked it , it was head on, if you could you should write more. it was like the manga witch is my fav of all, this is a good novalization, keep writeing please, if only your could get this message maby it's a lost hope.
| Mariamus chapter 1 . 6/7/2006
Please continue with it, I'd love to read it all :D
| Nythology chapter 1 . 1/26/2006
Hey, loved it
| Spirit of Halo chapter 1 . 5/26/2005
so far so good! i like your style, it flows very well with the manga
| Prototype07 chapter 1 . 5/21/2005
I have concerns about the legality of this sort of project.
| melaniestarwind2 chapter 1 . 9/10/2004
nice job write the other comic's too come on please
| Fear Me chapter 1 . 11/19/2003
I know Gunnm inside and out and in my opinion you did a very good job transfering Kishiro's Beautiful artwork into words.
| Elliot Bowers chapter 1 . 11/15/2003
_I am impressed with your preliminary
chapter, but... Oh yes, there are always
caveats, aren't there? Why, yes there are! It
wouldn't be too helpful a critique if I just gave
praise without offering up some suggestions for
future improvements! (Yeah, that is why they
call 'em critiques, dudes and dude-ettes:
'Cause we have criticism, good and bad) So
here I go-pointing out faults and giving some
_Let's get the nasty part done first: the
criticism part. (Wait, wait... Gimme a
moment... Ah!) The ONE immediate problem was
with several lines, where you said, "...this
serendipity rising from him" and "...the remains
of cyborg girl." Serendipity doesn't "rise"
from people: Serendipity is akin to luck, so I
belive it would have read better if you would
have written "this moment of serendipity." Also,
you forgot the word "the" with the second
example. Particularly, you should have written
"of the cyborg girl." There were also other
instances of wanky English, but that's best left
to an editor. (Heck, I'm an amateur writer too-
not some corporate hack paid to mutilate...uh,
POLISH UP writers' works.) So that would be my
primary, if moderate, complaint: just SOME odd
English that can be fixed up just a little.
It's just something to keep in mind.
_With that done, let me tell you that your
work was surprisingly good after all!
Impressive was how you began the work with a
sort of sit-down-and-get-comfortable opening.
From there, the flow of dialogue and
description was smoo-o-oth-like a good bowl of
lightly cinnamoned oatmeal after a big cup of
hot chocolate. The pace was just fast enough,
while also remembering to set tone and ambiance.
Yes, you gave good descriptions while continuing
the story: very important. It's too bad I can't
give you plus-points on the plot...
_Before I finish this, here is a word of
warning: Don't try to do too much. From what
you propose to do, you could easily run into
several hundred pages: a massive project to do
in published increments. Take this warning for
what it's worth, I've written a few practice
novels myself, but you just may want to limit
your focus to two hundred-page blocks (around
fifty-thousand words) to publish at a time. Heh,
take as long as you like to do it-six months,
if need be. You have as long as your life to
finish projects, but just don't make them too
big. Then again, I'm a big project-man myself.
Interpret this as you will-maybe with the
help of some hot tea or hot chocolate.