Reviews for A Pain in the Heart
Selryam chapter 1 . 6/2/2007
Very nice and very cute ). Nice writing. Having Keitaro actually change after 3 years (being able to dodge Naru's attack, for example) was an interesting change. Authors tend to keep everyone the same over periods of time, so I like this.
brindani chapter 1 . 2/14/2007
This is a nice little fic. I do have a suggestion. Keitaro just dumping Naru like that is a little unrealistic especially after three years. There needs to be a little more to make it viable. A little introspective on Keitaro's part would work rather well here. Something along the lines of:

...She pressed a small hand to his chest, over his heart.

Keitaro's eyes went distant as visions of the past three years flashed through his mind. Images of Naru hitting him over and over. That powerful feeling he once called love slowly crumbling under each assalt. He remembered Shinobu standing nearby each time with words of comfort and a first aid kit.

He blinked at the hand lightly touching his chest. He slowly turned back to Shinou with an awed expression...

Just a suggestion.

Very cute,

Keikun chapter 1 . 11/19/2003
Okay Im just wondering if your going to keep this story going, because if you are Ill read it.
TornadoReviewer chapter 1 . 11/15/2003
YAHOO!Another great Keitaro/Shinobu romance!

Update soon because they are one of my favourite anime couples!

And try to humiliate Naru a little more:)

Andrew Joshua Talon chapter 1 . 11/15/2003
(waves KeiShin flags) WOO HOO! Not another KeiNaru fic! Go you! GO you!

Nicely done and sweet! I commend you! Please, write more soon! You hae a nice, easy-flowing writing style, which I must say I find very appealing! Keep it up! Keep it up!
shinobu chapter 1 . 11/15/2003
wai! this deserves a sequel or a chapter 2!
shinobu chapter 1 . 11/15/2003
wai! this deserves a sequel or a chapter 2!
Rion chapter 1 . 11/14/2003
EEr, actually I was trying to type 'sooweet' but I put too many Os and Es that it was shorten to sowet...
Mantis Man chapter 1 . 11/14/2003
You've got a good thing going here. It will be interesting to see if this turns into a K/S fic, or if Naru gets her act together and takes her turn in the hot seat of having to fight for love ;)
Knight's Shadow chapter 1 . 11/14/2003
Really good.
Sephimorg chapter 1 . 11/14/2003
Yay, thank you for posting my cookie!

And now that my compy's back, I can write all of my plot bunnies and finish my Kei/Shin fic!
Rion chapter 1 . 11/14/2003
SOWET! Is this going to be a one shot? I hope you will continue it!