Reviews for After the Dawn: The First Years
Destineyofme chapter 15 . 1/12
please write more one day
Elmerin chapter 2 . 8/17/2015
Hey, prologue looked great, but chapters 2, 3 and probably more, in italics, your stories very difficult to read. Also, could you put authors notes in bold, as it makes them easier to distinguish.

Good concept, poor layout.
harryislife chapter 15 . 7/27/2015
I really like it, I think it would've been a good idea for Harry to learn Occlumency.
Guest chapter 15 . 3/10/2015
I really enjoyed reading your story.
Thanks for writing.


You really need to work on plurals/possessives.
Sailor Pandabear chapter 15 . 8/17/2014
nice and sad and funny and good
tolraisgrey chapter 7 . 7/13/2014
Just a tiny thing, TaeKwonDo is a Korean Martial art, so you wouldn't address a teacher as sensei, and you wear a dobok, not a Gi. That's judo :) (a blue tag taekwondo artist)
Also Professors aren't really a British thing and you don't tend to change classes by subject in Primary school - at least not in England. But then I don't Scotland does either. Plus year 7 is at primary school in Scotland :)
rosebud90 chapter 15 . 4/9/2014
I love u story
Noble Korhedron chapter 15 . 10/16/2013
Wish you hadn't quit writing - then there might've been more than just this and AD: First Year... #sad #glum
Noble Korhedron chapter 3 . 10/16/2013
Hmmm, interesting so far. On to Ch. 4! :-)
Ash-Bookworm113 chapter 1 . 7/5/2013
:O anyone mind if I kill Vernon...
no objections?...'kay then i'm gonna borrow Jason todd and his AK47, back in a minute!

:) evil smile

:P great chapter...even if the content was sad :(
sylvelle chapter 14 . 5/8/2013
Wish you hadn't done that.
quaff chapter 8 . 5/8/2013
Dudley was innocent.
Byakugan789 chapter 15 . 1/21/2013
Not bad. Not really sure what people were complaining about. Only thing you really got wrong was killing of a dozen of Sirius' family 5 years early and people have done far far worse for AU's.

Also, your confusion with the belts. The reason you're confused is because very few Tai-kwon-do instructors use a concrete belt system, letalone actually teach tai-kwon-do. The belts change constantly from group to group and are more often a showboat for the parents thing than anything meaningful. A little tidbit for you though, tai-kwon-do is Korean, not japanese, so you'd be saying chokyonym or sabanym, not sensei. Kata is also the japanese word for patterns. Works if you're doing karate, which you mentioned briefly, but not tai-kwon-do which you referred to constantly.
hotcat chapter 15 . 12/10/2012
great story
blue-box-quidditch chapter 15 . 11/20/2012
Brilliant job, I particularly liked Dan. It's nice to find believable OC's.

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