Reviews for Metasite: Birth of a Hero
Angefantasy chapter 10 . 2/3/2004
That was a trully beautiful chapter, the way you describe the battle... it was awesome! It's shown you've spend time to learn the advantages of swords and spears... I could saw the battle before my eyes... beautiful
For me, yes, you've answer why squall help Galbadia when its soldiers has killed his parents... And how he could have such a reputation... he's a very strong fighter. And for my questions, I don't expect you to answers them immediatly, most of them couldn't answered before the (almost) end of this story... so, I could wait.
Thanks for the best wish... they're finished now, so I've a little time for myself... winter's break is coming anyway...
Just keep writting?
Etherealist chapter 10 . 2/3/2004
*is kissed* lol, that is one awesome battle scene right there! I am quite like you - I like writing out every step of my battles also. Sebastian DID seem to have all the advantages but thank Hyne Squall got through. How DID Emi know? I have a hunch about it but I should go back and do some research just to make sure, lol. Update soon!
angel-brokensorrow chapter 10 . 2/2/2004
that's kinda sad...but that fighting thing with that dude was cool and also very smart on Squall's and your parts. that might not make sense but what can you do? I did like this chapter too. i can't wait 'till the next time you update. (soon _)
Ari-Morrigan chapter 10 . 2/2/2004
YAY! I'm glad that the finals are over for you, since they are a pain at the end of every semester...
Anyways, nice chapter! The research on the spears and swords really showed through on the fight scene. (Educational as that's how warriors fight with a spear.
Very different from what I pictured but then again the only equivalent I saw of spear fighting was Gaia the Fierce Knight from Yu-Gi-Oh charging at ya with two lances coming toward you. _; Scary even though the attack points on Gaia sucks for a 2 summon and yet he looks so tight! *cough* Well it was either that or a bunch of amazons running forward with their spears poised and ready to impale anything that moved. _;;)
Woah, totally got off subject but again, a very neat and kool fight scene with metasite blood spilling with soldiers dropping dead left and right. Squall is finally piecing things together with some doubt here and there...
Keep on writing! Laterz! ~_
remote mine chapter 9 . 1/22/2004
I was busy, so that's why I didn't review your last chapter (or two). Well, great chapter! But some of the sentences seem a bit run-on~ish...I can't do constructive criticism. Enjoyed the characterization and the reactions of the characters.
Etherealist chapter 9 . 1/22/2004
Really? Hm, then my memory must be getting fuzzy or something because I am sure that I would remember something like that... OR maybe you just haven't updated in a long time and I forgot! Anyways, yay for Squall! He beated Seifer! You could practically foretell the even greater tension between the two now. Well anyways, I've updated my vampire fanfiction. Took me a month, yes I know, but I was quite busy. Write more!
Ari-Morrigan chapter 9 . 1/21/2004
The fight scene between Seifer and Squall was very intense! ) Overall, very interesting chapter that contained a lot of important reactions in the plot... Especially Emi's reaction to Squall fighting Balamb. _

Anyways, good luck on your finals! Laterz!
angel-brokensorrow chapter 9 . 1/21/2004
thank you soo much! finally! now i know what character development's called. you did a great job on this chappy by the way. i can't wait 'till you update next! OMG-I wonder who that dude is in that picture thing...o well...i guess i'm gonna have to wait! :(
XxMazLeonhartxX chapter 9 . 1/21/2004
This chapter's really good...I like how Seifer reacted to loosing, I wonder if he will still be friendly towards Squall? I think Squall is a tiny bit out of character, but that's the only thing I think is wrong in this story, so update soon :)
Danielle Breon chapter 9 . 1/21/2004
Oh, sure. Make the big man want to eat all the time. lol! Anyway, not many errors in this chapter. Just a few places where your finger must have slipped on the keys.
Angefantasy chapter 9 . 1/21/2004
Nope, you don't loose reader... some of them are just... not there for a while...
Whoa... I can't believe I've miss so much chapter... and the worth is I'm also in exam for the next weeks, so I won't probably be able to read for a moment, most likely 2 or 3 weeks... oh, damn... Life sucks sometimes...
So, Squall has meet Rinoa's sister and mother, and befriend them. Is it why perhaps he was so easily drove to Rinoa, because he remember them and their kindness toward him? This friendship, did it had endangered them, 'cause Seifer would seek revange from being beaten by Squall on them? 'cause, really, there a beginning of hate from Seifer, I could just smell it...
How, what would be interesting to learnt is : what happened during this battle that made it a turning point in Squall's life...? But that's next chapter, isn't it?
Anyway, please keep writting... I still do love your stories...
Rhi-an chapter 9 . 1/21/2004
Thanks for the update!
Danielle Breon chapter 8 . 1/12/2004
That was nice, relaxing chapter to read after reading the last, bloodbath chapter. Not too many errors in this chapter. Just a few punctuation errors, that's all.
Etherealist chapter 8 . 1/10/2004
Girls are bigger than boys? Hm, I've always thought that boys are bigger than girls and their skeletons are heavier *shrugs*. Anyways, that is one impressive score that Squall received on his exam! It is nice to see that he is making friends. Emi reminds me of Rinoa for some reason and both of them have mothers name Julia. lol, coincidence?
angel-brokensorrow chapter 8 . 1/10/2004
Hello again! It's kind of sweet that Squall actually has friends now. (Didn't mean that in a mean way.) I REALLY want to know what happens next. This chapter was slightly uneventful but thats ok! I don't really understand how character development works but i suppose you did pretty well. Great job!
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