|Reviews for Warrior Mage|
| DaveC chapter 14 . 8/16
Hi , don't know if this link is still working, but it's 16/08/16 and still no new chapter, when was the last time you posted, it seems a long time ago. In this second chapter was going to be a rant on posting chapters, but there's no point. It was a good story though and you should keep uo the good work.
| Blufox03 chapter 14 . 8/9
I love this! When are you gonna update?!
| The-Pipster chapter 14 . 5/19
| overlord of hell 2012 chapter 14 . 3/20
Enjoyed your story and look forward to reading more
| Blazeb79 chapter 14 . 11/6/2015
| Martin Blue chapter 14 . 10/18/2015
Love this story, hope youncontinue it
| Satsuki2015 chapter 14 . 10/3/2015
AMAZING! the story so far has been very intriging, well thought out and absolutly captivating. i love what you have done and the elements that have being added to it. the story is great and the characters are evolving well, i honestly can't wait for the next ch, and what will happen from now on.
| DaveC chapter 14 . 7/16/2015
Well get on with it
| rob-cb lazy chapter 9 . 7/2/2015
i really like your story, BUT i don't at all like your way of writing relationships, you show only a few little bits and then tonks is suddenly harry's girlfriend and the very next chapter he asks her to marry him, having never even met her parents before? its not that that is so weird in itself but just the whole relationship seems to not really be there, no lead up, no feelings just few small comments and bam relationship. If you are interested in improving i recently read a story by the name of 0800-rent-a-hero . i found the way the romance was written there to be not only organic but it gave me that bubbly feeling in my stomach when reading good romance. For general tips i would say:
- there needs to be a buildup, allowing the feelings of each character to bleed through to foreshadow the relationship, you might have done a little bit of this but it came across as forced and needs to be highlighted more, maybe some fluff? i really like fluff, i imagine many people do
- You didn't have a clear starting point of the relationships just harry feels guilty again tonks came to help and when they came out she was suddenly his girlfriend, felt very forced and didn't (from my perception) contain any feelings whatsoever.
-you just can't have them marry this quickly and in this way, it feels extremely forced and if i were reading this for the romance i would have left and not come back
- Generally add more scenes between the characters and fluff, as previously mentioned, is very important in this regard, it is these scenes that give me the feeling which is the very reason i read romance, not the lemon, even though that certainly has a place in a story, there was one person who did do that, although it was a single lemon in a VERY long story so that may have increased the impact of it.
Sorry for rambling a bit there, i wish you much luck in any further endeavours
| WhiteElfElder chapter 9 . 6/26/2015
What about Harry teaching the Patronous to the Warriors?
| WhiteElfElder chapter 7 . 6/26/2015
Harry should have refused to give them the potion because Snape will turn it over to Voldemort and the DEs.
| 1LoKota chapter 13 . 5/30/2015
love the book and i know its been a while since any updating. i know it has probably been scrapped by you but i can hope lol
| Milagro626 chapter 14 . 5/26/2015
Any more chapters coming? This is a great story, and I would hate to see it end as abandoned
| LordWoodrow chapter 3 . 5/23/2015
Great story :)
| LordWoodrow chapter 4 . 5/23/2015