|Reviews for The Long Way Home (Part One: Hell's Half Acre)|
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/2/2001
Nice...I LOVE THIS FIC! It's so tense, and so action-packed, and so...hooking! Get the next part out soon! One thing though, not to offend you, just a little constructive criticism. A little too much padding. Your descriptions are REALLY, REALLY GOOD, but sometimes, they just bog the story down, and make it drag on and on, know what I mean? Basically, your pace is too slow. Everything else though, is perfect!