Reviews for You call my name
fdsfghh chapter 2 . 10/10/2004
Ok...Still confused up in here...Bah. Whatever.

Normally, I'd review in terms of 5 major characteristics of the story: storyline, characterization, details, writing style (AKA: choice of words, expressions, etc.), and fluff. But since this is an "old" story, by which I mean no longer being updated, I'm just going to make my reviews more in tune with an opinion than an actual review.

So...Let's begin. Brian scares me, Tala is a good actor, Tyson is hilarious! Kai seems to be showing a certain affection for Tyson at this point. *Wiggles Eybrows*
fdsfghh chapter 1 . 10/10/2004
In all honesty, I don't really get the storyline. Assumbably, this segment is somewhere from Beyblade (Season 1). I haven't really seen much of it so I don't get the storyline here. From what I can guess, Tyson beat Tala in the Beyblade World Championships, Rei was in the hospital and forced his way out of there to watch, and Tala and Brian's team was founded by Biovolt (or something like that). Am I right? Am I wrong?

The storyline, even though I don't completely comprehend it, seems to be taking off to a good start. Characterization is excellent. You could use a bit more detail in here though, but since this is the opening chapter, it might not be completely necessary. Fluff, N/A (for this chapter). Your writing style is kinda confusing, but I'll work my way around that. :)

Summary

[Positive] Storyline, characteriztion

[Negative] Details, writing style
Parasitic Eve chapter 21 . 2/7/2004
HOOBBY-SAMA! I LOVE YOU! hehehehe THat was great! YOu the best! Oh and good luck on you exame! I can't wait to read Dragoons Flight! Well i must go but *wipes brow* That was just plain wonderful!
-Nancy C.
Dragonix chapter 21 . 2/7/2004
ME: Aww... so cute!
AKIRA: And you don't have to grovel, okay?
KAI: Yes! *Does a victory dance*
ME: Yes, he's suddenly forgiven you now that Ty-kun's alive
AKIRA: He's dancing because he gets Tyson!
KAI: MY Tyson!
ME: Yes, yes...your Tyson, whatever...
AKIRA: How could we ahte the end? How?
ME: We loved the end!
KAI: I might of killed you if Tyson was dead though...
ME: ; Doesn't change much does he?
AKIRA: Get up 'Dragoon's Flight' up soon please
ME: Sorry if you can't read this well... my Dad broke the space key having a fit...
AKIRA: Ja ne!
dragona15 chapter 21 . 2/6/2004
AW! T_T*jumps with joy
I SO LUV THIS! THE END ITS AWSOME ! CUTEY SWEET BEAUTIFUL STORY ! WA I LUV IT I LUV IT I LUV IT I LUV IT...OUCH! WHO TROWN ME THAT ROCK!*glares at everyone suspicious. XD
Rugmonkey101 chapter 21 . 2/6/2004
Hob, I promise never to curse, hit, rant, shout, strangle, chase, threaten, or bother you in any other way ever again...on condition that you get a move on with dragoons flight.
You still havnt told uz who that man is, you just left it hanging but whats new?
but im glad that tyson is ok. he is ok isnt he?
good ending to a awsome fic.
now get writing kiddo, or you know whatll happen.
you gotta hav faith in yourself,they tell you your good,so stop saying you aint ok!
loved it babe
Ruggles
CrazyInsaneAnimeFanGirl chapter 21 . 2/6/2004
Well, at least they're living happily ever after!
Cat in the web chapter 21 . 2/6/2004
Tyson is alive, thats very good! But there are questions that are not answered! I hope youll write a sequel soon! I want to know who the hooded man is!
Kat chapter 21 . 2/6/2004
Tysons alive and i cant wait for 'dragons flight'. luved dis story
Timmesque chapter 21 . 2/5/2004
ME: YAY! Ty-chan's alive!
CS: Thank God.
CT: Anyway, we'll be keeping in touch and also waiting for 'Dragoon's Flight' What is it about anyway?
Rumi-Chan chapter 21 . 2/5/2004
WA! Hob-sama! *squeals* That was so beautiful! I can't hate you! WA! I can't wait to see "Dragoon's Flight"! I'm confident that it'll be as successful as "You call my name"!
~*Rumi-Chan*~
Devlinn ReikoBryanRei Luver chapter 21 . 2/5/2004
Aw! It's over! Anyway...I loved the ending! It was the perfect touch!
Great job!
Nanashio chapter 20 . 2/5/2004
yay! so very up to scratch! *blinks* Ty-chan? *sniffles... then bursts into tears* Ty-chan! *curls into a ball on the floor* poor Ty-chan! *sighs and sits up* heh, just shows how well it was written, a real tear-jerker... but it was great Hob-sama... *applauds* ()
kyeriakhalid and Shizune chapter 20 . 2/5/2004
sorry if i miss a few chapters but it was really good i'll be waiting for the Dragoons Flight okay!
Rumi-Chan chapter 20 . 2/4/2004
WA! So sorry that I didn't get to review this sooner! I've been so busy with school, and I have dance competitions coming up! My first comp. in on the 15th! Wish me luck! ;;
Kami...I'm so nervous, I feel as if I'm gonna puke right now!
Kai: Well...don't puke over the keyboard...it's not civil...
Rumi: Like YOU'RE ever civil Kai...
Kai: Damn right!
Rumi: *rolls eyes*
Kai: *sticks out tongue*
Rumi: Jackass...anywhoo...update onegai! I can't wait for the next chappie!
~*Rumi-Chan*~
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