Reviews for A Day at the Park
Crystal7 chapter 1 . 6/17/2004
I liked it in the beginning but I had a few problems with it. One, the men drooling over Miss Parker made her seem Mary Sueish. Two, Zoe being a complete clutz. I love Zoe (I don't want her with Jarod but I do love her) and I can't see her being that stupid. Three, I can't see Jarod screwing Zoe over like that.

I liked the end though when he took her in her arms and they dance. That was SO sweet. Overall, I enjoyed your story and hope you keep writing in the future!

Crystal
Onisius chapter 1 . 1/27/2004
i really liked this story. i was glad to see jarod get a slap across the face! he jsut wrot that letter to MP than goes and kisses zoe infront of her! job well done! *smiles*
PriscillaPal chapter 1 . 12/24/2003
I liked your story. I have always wanted to see a little more reaction from Ms. Parker, concerning the women in Jarod's life. I do believe she would act, like she did at the amusement park, if she ever witnessed Jarod publicly showing affection to another woman.