|Reviews for The Gift|
| sleepingsomewhere chapter 1 . 4/28/2016
This story is really cute and has a great storyline. I really enjoyed this one!
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/19/2016
I loved it, but I have to give you a little pointer. when your centence doesn't finish after a quote, put a cama on its end. continue your centence with a small letter and never start your centence with But. Another thing: when a word starts with a vowel like a, o, u - put an before it. Otherwise put a
Example: a cat, a rat, a mountain
an offspring, an armature, an unfortunate event
Hope that helps
| Animercom chapter 2 . 9/26/2015
This was a cute and sweet little story that I enjoyed reading. Everyone is in character and I'm happy that you included the ice skating date instead of just focusing on the party. I must say that I really liked the ice skating scene. :) I think that it's true that Botan doesn't get a lot of thanks or appreciation. She's supposed to be Yusuke's assistant but she barely does anything to help them. Watching the anime, I got the impression that the author didn't know exactly what do with her, what role she should play, and so he relegated her to the sidelines, but I digress. To counterbalance the ending and to hopefully give it a bit more of a oomph, a scene in the beginning that showed Botan not being appreciated and mistreated by Koenma might have portrayed just how lonely Botan really is. Just an idea I had. It's a little bit of a jump to go from having a crush/just beginning to realize their feelings for each other to then go to declaring their love for each other and desire to get married, if you know what I mean. I enjoyed reading this so thank you for writing it!
| DarkinocensDLT chapter 2 . 5/7/2015
*w* is very Cuuteee.
I loved, I would like you to continue, I think this Fic has a lot to give.
I loved skating scene was very unexpected, but great.
Thank you so much, I love reading you.
| DarkinocensDLT chapter 1 . 5/7/2015
It was a very interesting Fic, really, I love Christmas, I liked the descripcones this Fic, I'm glad I read.
| Reishi chan chapter 2 . 4/16/2013
It's soooo cute! I've always known Kurama is a nice guy.. Hope you would make more stories involving these 2 characters.. I am also a K&B fan and I think they would look so cute if they end up together.. In fact i am also very curious to see how their child would look like..
| Botan Youko chapter 2 . 10/28/2012
I really loved this fanfic, congratulations on the great work!
KB forever! :)
| CherryBlossom935 chapter 2 . 6/26/2012
Little of bit? Are you kidding me? I love it! I wanted to cry because it was just too beautiful!
I also admire how you made Botan and Kurama stay in character! I had a hard time doing that while writing my story.
And the way you wrote things is perfect! It's all perfect! I love it!
| reader chapter 2 . 9/3/2010
five stars rating for this story. aside from the fact that i like kurama&botan pairing, i find this story the most beautifully written romantic story for the love confession between the two. the author captured the personality of each character involved -and that's what i also liked. for another, the story was smoothly written; no major grammatical errors. well done. :)
i would want to watch this if it were to be made a special edition of Yu Yu Hakusho. :)
| dela490 chapter 2 . 4/16/2009
hello. As usual with your stories it's wonderfull. I can't find word to describe what I think. I love it so thank you, thank you, thank you for all those marvelous moment we have in reading your story. I hope to read more soon of you.
| animevideogame freak chapter 2 . 11/25/2007
i loved it so sweet and adorable
| Vaxl chapter 2 . 11/13/2007
I want to hug and cuddle this fanfic! And it's also awefully ironic that I found this on November 13th. :P
Most of all, it's grammactically correct.
Some things wrong with your grammar- You're using periods to end a sentence in quotations. The problem with that is you're not suppose to use ending makrs in a quotation, unless it'sa question or something said with exclamation-point values.
The young authoress began to lecture,"You, blue-eyed-suichi, who I believe I've read stories from before, should try following this example,". She pauses, to give you time to reflect on what she typed. "Notice where the period is placed? That's becuase periods are used to end a sentence. You can use periods in the middle of quotations, however, if you don't feel it nessesary to add a break into the middle of the speaker's line," Vaxl explained, as kindly as she could.
"Now, I have no idea why, but the wacks who invented our grammar thought it'd be weird if we used our periods at the end of a quote!" She yelled in a venting tone, "But it's probably becuase that since it's not part of the sentence, but rather something seperated to make writing easier. I think that's it, but you could object, right?". The 8th grader pulls down a chart that explains that no matter what punctuation was used in a sentence, you always put a period (Or the others) at the end of a sentence, no matter if a sentence was just ended in a quote. As said earlier, the quote isn't much part of a sentence.
One thing, it's acceptable for Kuwabara or Yusuke to say this, as they don't really give a damn about grammar, but when you said, "Yukina and I", that's not right, either. With those and- (noun/pronoun), you have to be careful. Example: "Bob and I are going to the store," wouldn't be correct becuase saying "I are going to the store," wouldn't make sense, would it? Instead, you should try "Yukina and me," if Kuwabara was trying to be grammactically correct.
I hope my tips helped- Good luck! Cya!
| TheDemonQueen1 chapter 2 . 4/12/2006
Wow... I loved this fic. It was so sweet and so happy! I loved it! Thank you for writing it! Well I gotta run. Ja ne!
| xmiahimex chapter 2 . 2/10/2006
Aw...I really luv'd it. It's so cute and no matter how many times I read Kurama and Botan pairing I never get bored. They really do seem perfect for each other. And I really like you writing, this is the second story that I've read from you and I have to say that you are one of my favorite authors. And I really want to read more of After the Fall. D
| teh wheelbarrow chapter 2 . 11/8/2005
Alright.. So I guess I'm like, 2 years late to reviewing. Still, reviewing is good. So that's what I'm doing.
That... was... so.. amazing! You wrote it extremely well! And it's so sweet it made me feel like melting. It was very realistic, in character, and... beautiful! I absolutely loved it. :) You have some fantasimus talent. Great, GREAT, job!