|Reviews for Blurred Vision|
| doomweasel chapter 1 . 1/21/2006
There are wonderful descriptions in here that paint a really vivid picture. The sentence structure needs a little work - try to avoid run-ons! I'd also like to see more attention paid to how Mae feels about loosing her parents.
Overall, though, this was pretty good!
| Shogun chapter 1 . 6/29/2005
Interesting focus on May. I do enjoy a twist to the story and I am so darn sick of fanfic romances. Your story is well written and original. Thank you.
| mooglegirl chapter 1 . 5/1/2004
An interesting choice of character, and the story is nicely built up, untill the action bursts out at the end. I'm intreagued now as to what becomes of May- will things get better for her? Will she get over her deeply routed need for vengence, which seems to drive her now. If she can't fight the thoughts out of her head what will she do? I hope there's more to this story!
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/16/2004
is that all?
| babyb26 chapter 1 . 1/1/2004