Reviews for Muscles Used In A Smile
Phamtom of the Pie chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
I think this is the piece that sealed this pairing for me. I've read other fics that describe their relationship as an old married couple's, which is so far from the truth it hurts. However, this piece? This piece hits the mark right in the bloody heart. Ouch. And hot damn, I swear you've the best characterization I've read so far. Love your Gojyo voice. I really just love this whole fic; the beginning was great, the sheer accuracy and poignancy just floored me - and Hakkai's last line breaks my goddamn heart. Bravo.
authorialintent chapter 1 . 8/17/2004
Although my favorite pairing in Saiyuki fandom remains 38/83, well-written 58s make me tread the borderline.

I don't know how you manage to capture the characters' voices so effectively, but please *please* continue.

Again, love your figurative language: "like I'm his curator or something." This type of fic is what a little fangirl like me waits for.
Karu Leonnese chapter 1 . 6/16/2004
Aw...I liked it. I loved Gojyo's inner um..metaphors. _
Zek Majiri chapter 1 . 5/27/2004
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woah.

This is really, really good.

Like REALLY good.

Zek
Reiya Inc chapter 1 . 2/25/2004
...I am completely blown away by this. I can't even begin to describe how jarring it was to read that. From beginning to end, I was captivated by this incomparable writing stlyle. The bits of sarcasm, the tension, everything was just so compelling. Thank you for giving the 58 category something to brag about.
~Reiya
Me-Nuriko chapter 1 . 2/5/2004
Poor Gojyo, poor Hakkai. You really have a talent for angst. So sad.
Karcy chapter 1 . 1/29/2004
If there's one thing I love about the Saiyuki fandom, it's how it introduced me to writers who can really turn fanfiction into - dare I say? art. Literature. When a story means more than what appears to be written.
Forgive me for reading too much into something if it's not there, but I sense a conflict of affections between 5&8. Something involving mixed messages, perhaps? Am I on the right track?
That said, I love the way you put Gojyo's thoughts into words. Very -him-. And I loved how you portrayed Gojyo's devotion to Hakkai.
wanderingwidget chapter 1 . 1/28/2004
ek, sad, depressing, angsty, goodness . Loved it, it rocked, it was angsty, did I mention the angst? I like the angst...
stitcher2ficcer chapter 1 . 1/23/2004
This, too, is a poignant and heartbreaking read. Your language and style capture beautifully the tragedy of their failure to communicate and their persistent misinterpretation of each others' feelings.
Great job with the first-person, stream-of-consciousness pov-not easily done well. Excellent Gojyo insight into Sanzo's character, and very nice elaboration of what Gojyo went through to put Gonou back together to become Hakkai.
I am always amazed to find truly fine writing in fanfics... I hope you use your tremendous talent for "serious" (read "possibly publishable") writing as well.
Veszelyite chapter 1 . 1/4/2004
Wow, that was powerful stuff. Very strong Gojyo voice, and lots of truth cast out in those little one-liners. ...And Hakkai's part...oof. Had to take a moment to recover from the somewhat shell-shocked state in which it left me. Nice. Not a happy fic, but very well written. The intro with the smile definitions was very cool, too. _
krimson chapter 1 . 1/3/2004
Youch! Makes me want to loik the boys in a room and throw away the keys. Talk about a need to communicate!
A Random Person whose to lazy to sign in chapter 1 . 1/2/2004
Good! Oh, and thr summerys one of me fav. lines from 'Into the Woods'.*grin grin*
For once nothing random happens
X-parrot chapter 1 . 1/2/2004
just 'cuz I'm a sucker for a happy ending don't mean I can't enjoy the ones that aren't. pretty damn nice, if oh-so-cruel, accomplished stream-of-consciousness that tells it sideways and sadly complete.
I will join the growing chorus of 'please sir may we have some more' because indeedly there is not enough well-done 58 to satisfy...
KaKa chapter 1 . 1/1/2004
Brilliant but "cruel".
I wonder why you said your *favourite* pairing was 38 when your 58 fics were all so well written(even better than your 38 fics to me). You gave depth to that relationship and your Gojyo POV had me hooked.
Waiting for your change of heart and more 58 fics. This one is great! Thanks a lot.
Zansetsu chapter 1 . 1/1/2004
Brillant... *in awe* The Hakkai ending is a really nice touch. *grins*
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