Reviews for Urban Shakedown
8 years later chapter 1 . 3/2/2012
THIS STORY SUCKS DICK HOLY GOD
aRSeNRiGGS MHiNe chapter 8 . 11/10/2010
BATHROOM SCENE: Epic Fail!

F*ck you Jevonte, F*ck you!
tecna jessie chapter 8 . 9/17/2010
now vomiting at the keyboard...

SH*T! this was an internet cafe...

the owner will kill me. :(
tecna jessie chapter 8 . 9/17/2010
*calls Jessie from Team Rocket.*

just read this while I puke.
tecna jessie chapter 8 . 9/10/2010
what the...?

*screams and runs around the campus.*

so romantic and covered with lust in a MAJOR MAJOR WAY.!

nice one HD.

*sorry I didn't noticed it before.*
tecna jessie chapter 1 . 9/8/2010
i felt a major major major Elise/JP over here!

For JP and Elise: keep the FIRE BURNING between you two!

~TecnaJessie~
Ziggyboo chapter 6 . 11/18/2006
So, it's a parody, huh? Too bad it's not actually funny. \
Ziggyboo chapter 4 . 11/18/2006
Um... wow. I can't believe this seems to have so many positive reviews. So far it's OOC and screamingly racist-and I'm not just talking about Elise dropping the word nigger everywhere. \
elvenangel chapter 10 . 10/26/2004
Man I'm just waiting for Derek to lose it and scream out "I'm GAY" in front of everyone lol.

elvenangel
elvenangel chapter 8 . 10/26/2004
Way different story dude. It's entertaining though. Fyi Marisol is from Venezuala (I think that's how you spell it lol) not Brazil. I also think this story probably should've been R the whole time because of the cussing. Just a suggestion. Anyway, good story.

elvenangel
anna1iss03 chapter 12 . 4/12/2004
The end! Um.. I have no review for this chapter, except, I
anna1iss03 chapter 11 . 4/12/2004
DAY-UM my instincts are good! Haha! I can't believe Derek is really gay. I'm still hi-fiving myself for that. And... Seeiah's not a lesbo? That's... interesting. Sorry, but I still view her as one. Sorry I haven't been reading/ reviewing, desperado :'( I've been busy :'( But now I'm making up for it! Two chapters, this time!
Vivi FF chapter 12 . 4/11/2004
What an awesome ending! Yup, I actually got around to read the rest and your entire story was awesome. It was definitely worth reading!
I think it changed my views on Marisol a bit, but not much cause I already know she's cool. I know it'll change other people's opinions either in a bad way or a good way (depending if they get to the end or not).
Good luck on your future fics!
laidback chapter 12 . 4/10/2004
Hey HD,
I read through all 12 chapters at once, I find it easier to make opinions on the whole thing versus each individual chapter. So, thats why there is only this one review.
Anyways, just wanted to thank you for the interesting read. Its quite cool to see the characters in a different light. Awesome job, and I am looking forward to anything else you decide to do.
LB
gem0086 chapter 1 . 4/9/2004
Hmm...
It was a bit rushed. Very short first chapter.
Other than that, yes it is an original fic, I'll give you that. Rarely do people do fics that revolve around Marisol. I will read the second one when I get the chance, but for now, I have to lick my wounds.
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