|Reviews for He Would Die for Her|
| kris chapter 6 . 9/25/2005
both of tom's parents were dead by the time he was like 10.
| Elenrod chapter 6 . 7/13/2004
NO! Amanda must die! good story but that Amanda freak must die.
| Mary-Sue Hater chapter 6 . 3/1/2004
Can you say (or read) Mary Sue? Yeah, that's what this is. There's no saving it, Amanda is a Mary Sue! (not that I blame you, who wouldn't want to marry Shane West?).
What about Becky Thatcher? Tom Sawyer's first love? You've got a good idea...it just needs some reworking.
| Capt.Cow chapter 6 . 2/12/2004
More soon please! REally enjoying this story!
| Queenbeth2 chapter 6 . 2/11/2004
I like it. Update soon! MORE SKINNER DAMN IT! SKINNER ROCKS! NEwho update soon. BTW when are we doing the lit project again?
| Vic chapter 5 . 1/31/2004
hi i love the story are ur thinking of more chapters
| Queenbeth2 chapter 5 . 1/19/2004
I liked it a lot so you have to update soon or I will be very mad. And you wouldn't like me when I'm mad. BTW you need more Skinner in this story
SKINNER ROCKS! _-.
| Graymoon74 chapter 3 . 1/14/2004
Poor Amanda...I hope Tom gets there quickly.
| Jean-GreyPhoenix chapter 5 . 1/13/2004
Nice story is ther more chapters
| Capt.Cow chapter 5 . 1/13/2004
Oh no! Tom has to save Amanda or die for her! I can't stand her thinkinbg he doesn't love her!
| David Spence chapter 4 . 1/12/2004
Great story you've got so far, but I have one question; is Arson telling the truth about Tom and Mina, or is it just something to break Amanda's spirit? I mean, you mention in CHapter 3 that Mina had feelings for Tim, but it doesn't say if they were lovers or not
Sincerly, David Spence.
| S a i r a h i n i e l chapter 3 . 1/11/2004
u know what i think? i think u need to UPDATE! update! i really like this and i hope that man burns in hell. ) i like it!
| S a i r a h i n i e l chapter 1 . 1/11/2004
awe poor tom! ( thats so sad! tom to the rescue!
| Modest Hobbit chapter 1 . 1/10/2004
I'm not "Flaming" you. I'm "Critiquing" you with grammer, spelling, whatever I find.
First thing I noticed...
1. 'Jekkel'. It's not spelt like that, obviously. It's spelt "Jekyl".
2. "Tom, you have to come. Your a young lad. Rum on the house by me." Skinner said.
It's supposed to be "You're." as in, "You are a young lad." Your is what you use when you say something like, "Well, that is YOUR car." It shows that you own it.
3. Tom moved little trying not to wake Amanda.
Should be a comma here, "Tom moved little, trying not to wake Amanda". It just makes it look better.
3. Amanda said talking to the little 6 month old knowing that she wouldn't talk back.
There should be a commas here: "Amanda said, talking to the little 6 month old, knowing she wouldn't talk back."
4. Bassenet is spelt "Basinet".
5. "Lund you stay here and make sure there is no traces of us." the msyteries person said.
Comma after Lund. And its spelt "mysterious".
6. It's 'Sincerely'.
Sadly, I'm to tired to continue critiquing to chapter 2.
Please don't take these as an attack. It's only a critique.
| Me chapter 1 . 1/10/2004
Um, whatever happened to Becky Thatcher, Tom's first and only love? Amanda sounds a little too much like a Mary Sue (an author's self insert designed to fall in love with the main character). You need to explain where Becky is, and why Tom doesn't love her anymore, and what made him fall in love with Amanda, etc. This is not a flame, this is constructive criticism, so please don't feel bad or anything. Keep writing. Practice makes perfect.