Reviews for Triumvirate of Power
Ingrid Williams chapter 10 . 10/3/2019
A great trio of stories! Thanks for all your efforts!
Guest chapter 10 . 8/2/2019
I thought malfoy and worm tail had been executed for murder early in your first instalment. What were they doing in the great hall in the final confrontation?
Guest chapter 6 . 8/2/2019
Now we're moving! what an original idea!
Guest chapter 5 . 8/2/2019
5 chapters and they haven't all reached the castle yet! I've read your note at the beginning of Ch 6 and share your frustration with the story. The pace is too slow. All three parts of this story had a LOT of apologising, back and forth, then another upset, and more apologising, and sleeping. I've kept going because the story idea was intriguing and you'd already finished all 3 stories - i'd never have had the patience to wait ages for such short chapter updates where hardly anything happened! You've left some glaring plotholes (in the last instalment: no grieving for their murdered headmistress and friend, no worrying about the practicalities of continuing to live in a dead woman's house, no interviews with aurors etc over the massacre, no reviving those downed with the killing curse, no obliviaters for that girl doing magic in front of muggles.) Your idea of Dumbledore sending pureblood students to spend 2 weeks in a non-magical school (WHY for God's sake?) stretched credulity to breaking point. You could still have had the school attacked by Death Eaters as Hermione had given away their school's name - presumably to whomever had orchestrated the attack at Hogwarts and put Sirius under the imperius curse (another plothole, and HOW did all those DEs get into Hogwarts in the first place?) I've noticed that the most compelling writers on here have the most impressive pace. In the first paragraph you're in the action and hooked. Then every conversation, every paragraph moves the story along and makes clear WHY things have happened. I'm not a writer myself and couldn't do what they do so I don't know what the best approach is: planning the whole thing out and making sure everything leads to that goal, or flying by the seat of your pants. One of the most exciting writers i've come across on this site is RobSt who makes it quite clear that he doesn't know what is going to happen next as he hasn't yet written the chapter! And he churned out his earlier stories a (long) chapter a week. Don't get me wrong, I'm still here and enjoying your story, I just hope these comments help you tighten up your writing. And i love that everything is original and non-canon.
Guest chapter 4 . 8/2/2019
You realise your characters spend a LOT of time sleeping?
Emilie chapter 10 . 9/12/2018
WOW, I have really enjoyed this series. I'm sad it's over but you're such a good writer. You're really gifted. Keep writing!
Kali-blue chapter 10 . 5/7/2018
This was enjoyable, had some unique ideas. You seem to be obsessed with your characters sleeping, luckily the trio didn’t sleep as much as Harry ‘Alec Dumbles’ Potter. Anyways thanks for sharing your story. Kali
Kali-blue chapter 9 . 5/7/2018
Lucius and Peter were sentenced to be kissed by dementors with Narcissa after impersonating the trio in earlier in your tale. You never mentioned them escaping after their trial. I am wondering if your disenchantment for finishing up this story has made you less careful with the details or you held something back. Cheers, Kali
Kali-blue chapter 6 . 5/7/2018
Neat original idea about Myrtle; this is clever.
guest chapter 10 . 7/8/2016
OMG! This series was amazing, I read it all in one day. I love your writing. Thx so much for an interesting read
Delete-account-please-8018839 chapter 10 . 7/3/2016
This was great series and I enjoy reading it.
Delete-account-please-8010520 chapter 10 . 6/29/2016
Fantastic story though it was good.
Guest chapter 10 . 5/17/2015
Enfin LV a finalement capitulé grâce à l'association des HG, RW et HP et surtout à l'intervention du phœnix.
Guest chapter 9 . 5/17/2015
Très organisé le trio mais la réaction de AD reste bizarre que cache-t-il?
Guest chapter 8 . 5/17/2015
Est-ce pour cela que HP souriait?
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