Reviews for Grown ups mostly
005 chapter 1 . 5/30/2004
Ghost in the Machine chapter 1 . 4/28/2004
I liked the ideas in this, but the execution could have been better. Proper grammar and technique seperates great fanfiction from the merely good. The biggest problems were with homophones (words that sound alike, but have different spelling) and with dialog. The spoken and unspoken parts of a sentence are still the same sentence. There should only be one period. As an example: "Agreed." Superman said quietly.
Should be... "Agreed," Superman said quietly.
Go over this with a fine toothed editing comb and repost. The chapter update feature is one of the most useful things has. Don't be afraid to use it.
RobinIV chapter 1 . 1/16/2004
This story was great! I think you really captured how the new Teen Titans felt during that issue (which was the best so far). I'm also proud of the way Superboy acted. Starfiew & Wonder Woman both needed to be put in their place. Good work!