Reviews for Web of Lies: Revelations |
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![]() ![]() funny - danger in the past was the sequel to web of lies, and now this is the next one. Good job though. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just finished "Dangers in the Past", "Web of Lies", and "Web of Lies: Revelations", in that order. Interesting premise, well written! I think you need to modify some of your A/N's. WOL and WOLR are now a stand alone series, BUT DITP does make more sense if you read them first! Also, as far as I can tell, you never wrote a sequel to WOLR. As to the stories themselves, I thoroughly enjoyed them! However, my prior review still stands; a fifteen year old continually snuggling and sitting in someone's lap is a bit off-putting. DITP did get a bit repetitive, Harry runs to danger against advice, Harry exhausts his magic, Harry apologizes, Harry cuddles with Dumbledore or Snape, Harry sleeps for several days. Rinse and repeat. The WOL stories were better in that regard. Chapter length - I make it a rule NOT to read stories until they are marked "complete," so chapter length and delayed postings don't really affect me. Still, I get a bit annoyed with authors that keep apologizing for how they post. You authors are sharing your talents with the rest of us. Do it YOUR way; it's up to the reader to accept that or find another story! Grammar and language - I've noticed some discrepancies, but seldom have I thought what does THAT mean?! I assume that your beta readers are native English speakers. If not, you may want to add one that is. Your English is a lot better than my Spanish; all I can do in Spanish is swear. You keep writing, I'll keep reading - but probably not anything over 200,000 words! |
![]() ![]() You will not continue do you? After all these years... |
![]() ![]() He is not a teen he is 11 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love it |
![]() ![]() Thank you so much for this amazing piece! I love it so much, its so hard to find a really well written fanfic that has this kind of relationship between harry and dumbledore. Thank youu |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was really good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was a great story to read. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Anthony Goldstein is in the Story. Good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is Dumbledore going to let the Weasleys in on the secret? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope the hat doesn't blow Harry's cover. He would be safest in Ravenclaw or Hufflepuff. Because of Malfoy there might be problems in Slytherin. I'll find out where you put him as I read on. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It seems like there is a moderate change from Web of Lies I as Harry is on the train. He was not going to be on it. What house will he go to? Oh well, read on. |
![]() ![]() ![]() lmao this chapter made me want to become a teacher |
![]() ![]() ![]() I truly enjoyed your story. It was well woven and intriguing. I hope there is a sequel. You have created an interesting niche in the HP world. I like the apprenticeship idea. It should be in more stories! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is it wrong to wish he could stay as Alec? - At least if and until he NEEDS to be a Potter for the Wizengamot. |