|Reviews for Loss and Redemption|
| Fifty Points of the Mind chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
I love it. My action figures love it. My bed sheets love it. Heck, even my dog loves it. Great story, man( or woman). Continue as the sun rises and sets. Continue as the swallows return to Capistrano. Continue as you've never continued before, with vigor and fervor unparalleled. Go, brave warrior, upon unfamiliar lands, to conquer and glorify your cause, you name, your very being! With the pen as your sword and the paper as your shield, smite thy adversaries of sloth and malconetent. Bring forth the spirit of the true poet, and let your muse guide you to a place of great honor. That and you should keep the pairing Motoko/Keitaro. You should also read "To Live Not as a Warrior." id1266559 and "Then To live as a Woman." id1268706, the quintessential Volume 9 Divergance. That's about it for me...
| Gotenks01013 chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
WHoa! That's all i can really say about Chapter 2. Someone almost died while someone else just snapped with keitaro in the middle. I love seeing these takes on the marriage angle. Naru's reaction is very typical( if a bit more psychotic than usual). looking forard to more.
| Hououza chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
That was a beautiful chapter. It was dark but the emotions played out were done so carefully and with such depth even the most avid hater of such things I think would have pause for thought.
Not quite sure what a King Air is, good luck with it anyway. Look forwards to the next chapter when you can.
Till then good luck & best wishes,
| dbg2468 chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
I love this fic. It is so well done. i can't think of anything that is wrong with it. I almost started to cry when Motoko first thought she felt un-loved. So sad, but it was nice to see that Keitaro still has it in him. I hope to see him fall in love with her. Mostly because i perfer Motoko to Naru, But that's just me :P. I hope to read more soon. it is rare that a story moves me so much. You have a wonderful talent. Keep up the good work and, i hate to do this but i'm losing confidence in my own story... so if you have the time, please read mine. It's not as good as yours though. :)... BOO YAH!
| WAFFaddict chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
I can understand why people say they liked the humor. Its hard to associate the characters in LH with being serious. Yet you've managed to accomplish this, while at the same time keeping the characters in character. As someone who likes the Motoko/Keitaro pairing, I thought this fic came across well. I'd like to see more involvement with Sarah, Haruka, Tama, and Mutsumi, but I'm still looking forward to the next chapter. Good Luck.
P.S. If you need any help darkening the mood, I may be able to be of some assistance.
| Kei-kun chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
Awsome story, not much else to say but that. I cant wait for the next chapter. Please put it up as soon as you can.
| Carsomyr chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
This is by far one of the best "Love Hina" fan fictions ever writen. While not as much humor in this chapter the build up in the drama and the way that you have keep all of the characters in character is astounding. I am eagerly awaiting your next chapter and wish you the best of luck.
| tambourine chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
Very interesting, please continue soon.
| Rage Buddha chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
YAY! great chapter... i love your story.. and i hope it will stay a motoko/keitaro fic... dun really like naru .. but yeah.. GREAT fic.. one of my favorites... cant wait to see more!
| Das Leech chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
Whoa ... coming home from a five-day meditation trip and reading this is ... a little disturbing. Great dramatic plot so far, perfect writing in my opinion.
I'll definately see forward to your next chapter.
| WarriorDemon chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
very very good keep it coming
| lighthawkdemon1 chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
Hey, this is turning out to be pretty good. I've always been a fan of Love Hina fic that have pairings of Keitaro/anybody but Naru, though Motoko and Mutsumi have always been my favored girls. Keep up the good work!
| Knight's Shadow chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
Really well update soon.
| dennisud chapter 2 . 2/6/2004
A much better chapter than the first one and much more heart fealt. I was surprised that the funny parts weren't intentional but hey you got some attention none the less. You need to remember that as this story goes along. So far a very realistic chapter given the situation.
| Jonathan chapter 1 . 2/4/2004
Very good... Well thought-out, very in-character, a few (minor) technicalities short of being an official story...