Reviews for Mistress and Student |
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![]() ![]() ![]() To tell you the truth, I was really put off by the immaturity this fic reeked of. There were many spelling mistakes, most importantly the misspelling of Mi-Na's surname which is Seung, not Sung. Other examples include 'bumbed' (which should be 'bummed') and 'practise' ('practice'). The whole premise was a shallow one in which the characters behaved like mere cartoonish paper cut-outs. In short, the next time you write a romance (or anything else, for that matter), put some effort into it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() My, my, this was a delight to read! I'm more of a Mina/Hwang fan myself but after reading this along with a few others, I'm starting to like the Mina/Yun Seong pairing a bit more. I do love the Seong Mina and Yun Seong battle in SC2 (the prelude bit) and I laugh everytime she sneaks up behind him and gently pushes him with Scarlet Thunder. The "E!" noise he does cracks me up! 'Seeing his own chance for a little fun, Yunsung started chasing the screaming Mina around the room, while swinging the sword around, like a lunatic who's had too much to drink at the local tavern.' - lmao XD. I do like the relationship between them two - it was teasing yet at the same time it was rather darn cute :P |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it! It wasn't very romantic, but it kept both characters in character perfectly. Mina torturing Yun-seong is always a good plot idea ] Careful with the typos and such, though... especialyl when you're using "he" and "she", it can get a bit confusing if you mess those up. Otherwise good job! ] |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw... That was adorable. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not bad, for a supposedly "not romatic" fic. I thought it was really cute and your plot showed lots of development for a one shot fic. Keep writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() You did a good job. Could you possibly write another like this? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have to agree it wasnt that romantic. Still at least it fits in with the game story |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha the dud sword! thats a good one! |
![]() ![]() ![]() it was good |
![]() ![]() ![]() To begin with: It's Seung Mina. The next thing is that your paragraphs stumble and stutter a bit. Also, when a new person starts to speak, you start on a new line. Finally...damn Mina's mean! Quite nicely written, regardless. Keep on rockin'. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i don't get it. i mean, rolling on each other? that didnt sound right. but the story was still good, and stuff. mina is hot |
![]() ![]() ![]() Funny. very funny. keep up the good work. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() *lol* aww, how cute! |