|Reviews for Dragonball New Beginnings: The Ammit Saga|
| kwhitehill chapter 2 . 2/20
Never read a fan fiction... Already hook ya bastard haha
| Nyxeka chapter 1 . 3/28/2013
wonderful, wonderful story. I thought this was an awesome continuation..
| ssj5 chapter 56 . 12/6/2011
look their has to be a resonable explanation for what you worte you can not leave me in such suspense by the way as for your other story well done you have great talen tit would be an waste if you did not write a sequel to this mostly becauuse all the other dbz stories never have a sequel none that i know of anyway you have to do this for your fans i know you made one
| FinalFlashX chapter 55 . 11/26/2011
First off let me say that I love this story. It was very well written and it had a unique and original plot line. It had a lot of twists and suprises along the way as well that just added to the suspense of this story. Also you did a good job of keeping all of the characters cannon which is often hard to do espically when diving into the time period after GT. I was also glad that you kept all of the characters involved and did not just let one character take over the story. I was also happy to see that in the end it was Krillin who killed Ammit not Akira or Vegeta.
The only thing I can say I am a little diappointed in is that Akira seems to be too powerful throughout the story. I mean at the beginning he was able to beat Super Saiyan 2 Gohan without even transforming into a normal Super Saiyan. I understand that the Super Saiyan transformations multiply the saiyans base power level by a set amount, 50 times for the first level, 2 times that for Super Saiyan 2, and 4 times that for Super Saiyan 3. I don't think Goku was strong enough that he could fight evenly with Super Saiyan 2 Gohan while he was in his base form and since Akira I believe is suppose to have his strength from Goku it doesn't seem believable. Also Goku and Vegeta were dead even at the end of Dragonball GT in the Super Saiyan 4 form which means they were even in their base forms as well, so I don't see how Akira got to be so powerful if he got his strength soley from Goku.
And while Ithis isn't a critcism, I was kind of diappointed that Vegeta did not become a Super Saiyan 4 again. this is just because I am a huge Vegeta fan though so that is the only reason why. I was happy to see him become a Super Saiyan 3, it seemed the others were catching up to him so he had to put some distance between him and the other half-saiyans. Anyway can't wait to read the sequel! Again good job!
| TheDarkMaker01 chapter 41 . 8/10/2010
this is a brilliant story but there is a few spelling mistakes hear and there it is over all brilliant
| jeff chapter 53 . 5/1/2010
hey man, read both of ur stories several times. still a bit dissapointed in the super saiyan 5 transformation. the tips of his hair were red? red? out of all the colors in the world, red? i thought it was a weird color for the hair to change into
| NotQuiteHuman01 chapter 28 . 3/23/2010
Two things to say about this chapter
1. I F*ING KNEW IT!
2. Eww that's his grandaughter he kissed
also i hear ya on the the whole super Saiyan thing, if they were always the same level when they go super Saiyan then what would be the ponit of training after the became super Saiyans?
| NotQuiteHuman01 chapter 21 . 3/21/2010
Right just thought i'd review again, as i said before great story. I laughed quite a bit when I say your note about the twelve reviews, thirty chapters later and you've got more than twenty times that many. just thought i'd say good story realy
| NotQuiteHuman01 chapter 9 . 3/21/2010
Awesome story, but if you have similar conversations between to characters i really don't see why you have to mention it. you're using the same characters so it's hard to vary the dialogue without making characters seem out of character. for the people who haven't read Dragon ball next we don't need to know about similar parts and if those of us that have are upset you should really explain it to them. i don't get why people get so worked up, you can't claim rights over scenes that are using other peoples characters. but enough ranting i really liked the story and i tend to be quite picky, especially when it comes to DBZ fights i must say yours were pretty good but then again i have just finished a single fight scene that is almost two chapters long, and it's a tourniment fight so not a massive frenza v goku style fight. again great story looking forward to the rest i'll review every few chapters or so.
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| ArmyWife22079 chapter 53 . 10/19/2009
"I am the fulfillment of the natural order of things. Darkness only exists in the absence of light; it only holds power until the light returns. I am a light that shines in the darkness," a sparkling light-gold aura shone around Akira and chased all shadows from his face. "I am the answer to those that have cried out for retribution, who desired nothing but to live in peace and were struck down because of it. I am the truth to your lies, the life to your death, the strength to your weakness, I am your opposite and I am your end."- I was gonna wait till the end to review but I'm kinda wondering how you stole this from batman begains before the movie cam out...or they could have taken it from you...It may be slightly different but the same if that makes since.
| Apedreado chapter 55 . 9/29/2009
Kylewin, this is an awesomely incredible story and I totally plan on reading the sequel very soon. I think I'll sit back and bask in this story's awesomeness for a while...
| Taeniaea chapter 56 . 7/27/2009
| darkultrasupersaiyan3 chapter 1 . 6/28/2009
I read this story about 3 years ago and i would have 2 say it is one of the best fanfics i have ever read...you drug out the plot long enough to have a person eagerly waiting to read all 87 chapters...keep up the good work...
| Kurai Fenikuse chapter 47 . 6/18/2009
as for gohan's 'mystic' power, it is always on, like when guru awakened his potential. Transforming to super saiyans 1 and 2 boosts his power even more.