Reviews for Gohan and Videl: Our beginning |
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![]() ![]() ![]() cool |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, technically it's Gotenks' fault cuz if they weren't so cocky with the fat majiin buu, they would've killed him a lot faster... |
![]() ![]() Your grammar is just something else... Put some more describing words to give us an imagery of the scenery. Don't suddenly say that person A is in this building in one paragraph, and he just magically goes to another building in the next one. I'm really confused. The story's fine, but I've seen way better ones in terms of story-telling. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this you! |
![]() ![]() when you gonna write it im waiting. |
![]() ![]() Type your review here. You are too good when they marry do a sex with wild gohan story |
![]() ![]() God I am loving this story so far. |
![]() ![]() Amazing story |
![]() ![]() ![]() THIS STORY WAS INCREDIBLE It had everything, comedy, romance, angst and a perfect capture of everyone's character. I tip my scouter to you, great work and amazing story |
![]() ![]() You ideas are awesome love it |
![]() ![]() not to sound sexist but no wonder this thing is m rated your a guy but the only thing that's bothering me is the sickingly sweet speeches that annoy the cap out of me seriously I hate the mushy things it makes me think ur gay not that that's a problem that is awesome but other than that I love your story |
![]() ![]() THERES NO SEX |
![]() ![]() Hi |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice story |
![]() ![]() This chapter was wierd but sweet, but during the time I was reading goku's comments I said "since when did Goku become a fortune cookie?" |