Reviews for Gohan and Videl: Our beginning |
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![]() ![]() ![]() oh that was so good please let me know when you have more cause i would love to read more and hurry with it too! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm stating to like you...'re writings... They r really AMAZING! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love your story/ies, and I think there is nothing you should change... but, The names of three certain characters have been in my mind for a little while now. you know Eraser (/Eresa/Elisa), Sharpner and the geek that's always with them (Barry)... You might have noticed where did A. Toriyama come up with names like 'Eraser' and 'Sharpner' (well OBVIOSLY!). I don't mean to be annoying or anything else like that, but many fanfic writers have chosen to name the "Four eyed nerd", you named Barry, Pen... You know, Eraser, Sharpener and Pen... you get the point, right... anyway, I just wanted to tell u that... sorry for being such a dick... (If there are any "mis-spellings, or whatever, in what I just wrote, in my defence: English isn't my native... how do you say... tounge or language...) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Umm... Hercule did see when Goku and Vegeta transformed on the planet of Kaiooshin, right? And before that he saw Veget (, Vegeto, Vegito, which one you prefer...) in his transformed state! So why was he so surprised, when he saw Gohan go ssj? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Simply beautiful! This story is getting better by the second. first the "snogging", and now Hercules gonna' get his ass kicked!... well, probably. HOPEFULLY! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Now, this disturbs me a little... Videl explains to Gohan (in your story) how Hercule helped Goku 'n Vegeta on the planet of Kaiooshin, as if he (Gohan) didn't know anything about it. But he (Gohan, again) was already alive AND awake when Hercule did that, and he (you know who...) also gave them some of his energy! So why has he now got a sudden amnesia...? hmm...? |
![]() ![]() ![]() mhm... well... it was better than average... |
![]() ![]() I've loved all of your other stories. So I'll most likely love this one as well. We'll have to see eh? And thus I begin... |
![]() ![]() Hilarious, although Hercule always seemed a little less pig-headed to me during and after the Majin Buu saga, when he actually realized how strong people could be. Nonetheless, it was high time for him to get a real demonstration. |
![]() ![]() You commented during this chapter that Goku transformed even further than Gohan. That's not necessarily true. After the Elder Kai unlocked Gohan's full potential, he was able to call upon the full theoretical limit of his power without transforming. This is arguably superior to any Super Saiyan form, as SSJ transformations can be difficult to control, and consume energy at a more rapid pace. Simply put, Ultimate Gohan SSJ3 anyone |
![]() ![]() ![]() tip top gr8 fic dude im lookin 4ward 2 read the others mentioned, i hope that they will b as good as this 1! (giving thumbs up) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah, you've cheered me up yet again my friend. Thank you! |
![]() ![]() that was an awesome story, it was so sweet. i can't beleive a guy wrote it;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() used to have an outtake. where is it? P.S. good story |