Cute and well written. Your first attempt at a highly rated fic went well. And clichés are clichés for a reason, so you shouldn't feel bad for using them.

"They weren't friends, in the same sense that boys usually were. Naruto could proclaim Sasuke to be his best friend in the world in one breath, and then swear to strangle him with his own intestines and dance on his grave in the next."

Great line

I've read this several times now, and I swear that every time I reread this epic story, it just seems better and better. Honest to God, this has to be one of the best sasunaru stories I've ever had the luck to stumble across... I have no idea how you manage to keep their characters so IC, and I love the way that it comes to a close. -fans self with hand- u

Shortly put (and please forgive the poor language ;D) this is bloody amazing.

I'm left in awe.

x

That was a wonderful read! I love the interaction between Sasuke and Naruto, their reaction, their innocence, their hidden secrets!

You portrayed them well and everything felt very believable and intense. Usually I don’t read one shots but Im glad I took my chance with this one. The writing is great, the plot (though probably done before) was executed just right :)

I think you should continue writing M rated Naruto fics, if this was only your first try, I can't wait to see what else you'll be able to come up with given time and experience!

Thanks for sharing! It was much enjoyed.

I've had this story favorited for a long time and I've been meaning to review on it, so now I'm gonna do just that.

This story is actually one of the best I've read... I have a lot of favorite SasuNaru/NaruSasu stories, and this is actually one of the ones I've found that were most like the way Sasuke and Naruto would act. This just reveals a new side to the story. I almost want to know what the walk back was going to be like, to be honest. XD Kakashi-sensei would probably have teased the hell out of them, it would have been amusing to watch their reactions as well as Sakura's shocked expression.

It makes me want to write a SasuNaru story of my own, cause you write a lot like I do, giving the thoughts of one person and all that. And I'm glad it's from Sasuke's POV rather than Naruto's-Naruto's is obvious throughout the series, but you don't see Sasuke's as much. It's a change of...well, of viewpoint.

Anyway, I hope to see more stories like this, longer ones, cause I'd probably review on them, or at least keep track of them. XD And as a note, it doesn't seem 'clichéd', it's actually pretty damn adorable. This is exactly why I swear up and down that these two BELONG together.

Hope to see more stories from you, and happy writing!

~BlackNinjagirl

loved this! simply adorable

I LOVE THIS STORY!

WOW! This is nicely written! I really love it~ Thanks for writing this. Awesome job!

Just like... where do I pay you for writing this? It's so AWESOME! I wish I could write like you do. You're perfect. Perfect. Perfect!

...that was impossibly perfect. I love this kind of story, the first-time stories, with focus on making out/kissing..AGHHH.

JUST PERFECT. Favoriting this 3

A good story and Sasuke probably would be squirming in that conversation. Good work in the characterizing(?).

So sweet:)

_ yeah, i loved it. Nice to see Sasuke vulnerable for once.

So adorable!

Thanks for the good read.

Even though you thought the plot was cliched, I thought it was completely adorable. Sasuke's openness and strangely, shy anxiety were a nice change from his angsty side. :)

This oneshot was awesome. Sasuke was a bit girlish, yeah, but it didn't come out badly, and the smut scene was more emotional than pr0n-like, which is also a big YES. :D

All in all, I think this is an awesome piece of a fanfic. Thank you!