|Reviews for Continued Survival|
| Petite Madame des Chats chapter 17 . 12/14/2009
Love the story thus far. You're characterisation of Ryou just seems so spot on to the cannon character, it was a bit of a revelation to me - I gained a whole new level of understanding of Ryou's actions in the series. In hindsight I can totally see the disociation and distance of the character, and his shyness - I confess, I don't think I've ever read such a convincingly shy character ever. And I used to be incredibly shy myself, so I like to think I have some basis on which to make that judgement. The only critique I could actually make is that at times you seem to brush past things a little quickly - like with the scene Nott at the end here. EVen just a few extra sentences, even just a bit more description of Ryou's thoughts, Nott's expression, or just something a little bit extra. You've got the minimal sort of perspective that Ryou would have on these events to perfect, to the point where some of the subtlties of the scene are escaping us readers. To say what I've been trying to say these last few sentences, we aren't getting quite enough of what it happening from the other characters view. Even if all it is, is Ryou observing a facial expression or glance or something, to roud off the edges of a scene.
Anyway, I do hope you're planning on continuing this fic. I love the premise - and i think you are F*ING AMAZING for the whole bit with Ryou just not getting this magic thing. His confusion and misconceptions are so appropriate, because so far, no one has actually just sat him down and told him what the hell is going on. I am incredibly impresed by that.
So I hope I'll see another chapter from you sometime in the future! (preferably the nearer future ;P ).
| AotA chapter 17 . 10/23/2009
I have just read this story all the way to this point, and it is rare that I like Ryou at Hogwarts stories, because he always seems to end up a gibbering mess at the end of each chapter.
I think that it is so much better because it is more three dimensional.
Bakura has a /reason/ for sending Ryou to Hogwarts, Ryou doesn't understand anything that is being taught, but he is being proactive and /trying/ to learn. You also managed to give a much better insight into Ryou's head so we know /why/ he is a mental wreck, rather than simply saying that he is a mental wreck.
A question that I do have however, is: Why was Malik/Marik in London in the first place?
| DemonKittyAngel chapter 17 . 9/21/2009
did you stop this story? "I'll be really mad if you do. I'll have horrible tortures ready for you if you did stop. THis story is just to fricken awesome to leave. You're stupid if you did leave it. I hope you didn't.
| DemonKittyAngel chapter 15 . 9/21/2009
Wait, you mean people spell differently in Canada? But i'm from canada and din't know that! Then again we moved when I was 6 months old so I guess that's why... but really? You spell differently? Wow. I'm shocked. Is it my inner canadian tht makes me keep adding letters to words? THen againI have horrible spelling. ANd these mistakes are not from spelling. I just suck at typing and don't feel like fixing it right now.
| DemonKittyAngel chapter 10 . 9/20/2009
I melted when Bakura started hugging Ryou. It's such a believable take on both of them and your not bending them away from the original personalities but your still adding in that romance in a completely plausible way. I love it! You writing does move a little slow for my taste but I'm an extremely fast pasted person so it's dif for me (why am I only reading slow stories lately?). Oh well, this is the first story I've read staring Ryou an dI love it! I love Ryou and his Yami! So cute! I want to see Ryou get his dolls back but I bet that's already up here. I don't expect a reply to this reveiw and I'll reveiw on your latest chapter when I get to it. I just had to comment on the cuteness you put in there. Could've made Ryou feel a little more comfortable though. I mean, come on. He's in his Yami's arms. What could be better for him? Well besides a normal life. But we love to torture him.
omg! this reveiw just goes ona nd on! o.o I need to stop now before you have to read throguh 5 pages which I could easily write. Well, awesome story. Good plot. And this is just totally cool!
| Kris Phantom chapter 17 . 8/19/2009
I hope that there is more, please!
I wonder what Ryou will do with his new doll? Let Bakura burn it? Ooh, maybe ask him if he would hack it to peices!
No, that's too inhumane for the poor kitten...
I wonder if Bakura would allow his kitten a kitten? The spirit didn't mess with Crookshanks, after all. A real cat might even be good for Ryou. Maybe it would be good for Bakura too...
Is marik and malik going to appear? I'm a little worried about them, to tell the truth...
Update soon, please! You had me hooked from the first chappy!
| Mortimer S chapter 17 . 8/11/2009
Wow, this story is excellent! It's well written and well- dare I say- planned!
As for Nott, it's funny, but I've always envisioned him as scrawny and bookish- but that's just me. He's kind of like Ushio here, isn't he?
The bit in italics near the end of this chapter confused me a little bit. Was it Ryou talking to his dolls? That's what it sounded like to me.
As for grammatical/spelling errors, there were a couple in the previous chapters, although it seems that FF's formatting may have something to do with it. However, this chapter was lovely and immaculate.
Actually, I think Crookshanks is male (you portrayed him as a her)! But it's alright, I guess the cat works for the role both ways. In any case, you could always check the books for confirmation.
And poor Ryou! He wouldn't have been happy either way. Either Nott had his way, or the spirit. I really do think the spirit is better, but you've woven the metaphorical net very well. Ryou's stuck tight in the middle of it all and the dilemma captures the reader along with it (at least it does me). Again, beautifully written, and I anticipate the story's continuation!
| Duistere chapter 17 . 8/6/2009
I like this story very much up until now and I am curious how it will end, so please update, even if it is a small chapter you would make me happy with it and I am sure many others :)
| xDarklightx chapter 16 . 7/27/2009
I like it as a whole. Update soonest.
| xDarklightx chapter 15 . 7/27/2009
It is a little confusing in places.
| xDarklightx chapter 14 . 7/27/2009
| xDarklightx chapter 13 . 7/27/2009
I like it. Update as soon as you can.
| xDarklightx chapter 12 . 7/27/2009
It is interesting. How long has it been sense Ryou got to England? Update soon.
| xDarklightx chapter 11 . 7/27/2009
I love your story. I can't wait to read what is going to happen next. It is wrote well. Update as soon as you can.
| xDarklightx chapter 10 . 7/27/2009
I love this story. It is great. Update as soon as you can.