My critique:

-Good descriptions

-Grammar needs a little bit of reviewing

I'm not very familiar with this type of writing but judging it from the viewpoint of a short story, I find that you've done a pretty good job. Although I find that the use of anime characters is quite awkward, you are using it to your advantage, so good for you. But one thing about it, if you wanted more "soul" and "filling" to your story, perhaps you could've attached an introduction to who your hanyou is. Perhaps a simple introductory sentence that tells who it is speaking that also sets the mood you want.

Overall, good job. I'll give this one an 8/10 also, since I like your descriptions.

Oh my god... I was absolutely mortified! It was so freakin sad...! There were many tears, no sobs, cause my bro. was in the room. Damned... this is just so sad... I was practically trying with every single ounce of my strength to not bawl my eyes out!

You've really improved.

That was absolutely wonderful. I love the way you presented it - short, consise, and bittersweet. It's just how I'd imagine Inuyasha meeting the end. In a perfect world, there would be time for all of us to reflect on our life before we die.

very good it's just slightly OOC but that doesen't matter

Is there going to be more to the story? Becuse it would be very incomplete if you ended it there. _

Sesshomaru was kinda OOC. Just a little; not enough to worry about.

Well, I hope you continue!

-Zora

Well, Inuyasha was a little OOC, in the fact that he said his heart was frozen and that he didn't want to love. Didn't Kagome help him become more... uh.. loving? I don't think he would be all bitter just because she died of old age (if that's how she died.)

And youkai is the same for singular and plural, I think.

You should have added more Inuyasha thought junk. How he felt, etc.

All in all, very good story.

-Zora

Aw, poor Inuyasha. You have to feel for him...

And it's ok that it's short. I write short stoires all the time. _;;

Me too! Angst is cool. I always feel happy after reading or writing angst (for absolutely NO reason. I'm weird. Yay.)

-Zora

Oh, I don't care if Inu-san is OOC! This is wonderful!

So expressive! Keep going, please.

Wow it all sounds so happy yet sad...must be the first few chapters...or the way I'm imagining how he says it all...I dunno

wow that was just beautiful, it was sad but happy, I'm looking forward to the new chapter! :)

Great story so far. I think the formal tone suits the somber mood far better than slang could. Please update soon. I'm eager to read more.

o.O Inu-kun's talking to me!
Yeah, I think Inu's being a bit OOC...he's like...all dramatic and proper and stuff, and then he's saying "freakin'" again, so...I know what you mean about not writing angst in slang, but it kind of depends on the character, huh?
; But this is purty. I luff angst. Angst angst angst. continue, goshdarnit!

i like ur story, i think u should've made it a one shot fic. but i still have enjoyed it!
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um sorry to say..but that was horrible...it was very confusing..and ur grammer was horrible...i think i got a better idea..instead of writing..maybe u should go work at chapters..and talk about gundam wing books..somehting that ur good at..lol lol ol lol lol lol lol lol...