Reviews for Death Be Not Proud
FallenAngelOfInnocence chapter 1 . 3/19/2004
Interesting. I liked it. I've only ever written one poem and it was about suicide, so yeah. But this was neat.
Weyrdette chapter 1 . 2/29/2004
I promised i'd review and i am great story i think you should leave it at that there is nothing left to say the emotion she had was good material. Unless she falls in love with the jelus dude can't speel remember although i'm between the ages of 13-17.
Gabriella Black chapter 1 . 2/27/2004
this is so beautiful _ u should really continue w/ this idea..i love it!
~Gabby
Jayiin Mistaya chapter 1 . 2/27/2004
Death be not proud, thou some have called thee
mighty and dreadful, for thou are not so
for those whom thou think'st thou doth overthrow
die not, poor death, nor yet canst thou kill me
from rest and sleep, which but thy pictures be
much pleasure then from thee, much more must flow
and soonest our best men with thee do go
thou art slave to fate, chance, kings and desperate men
and dost with poison, war, and sickness dwell
and poppy or charms can make us sleep as well
and better than thy stroke; why swellest thou then?
one short sleep past, then we wake eternally
and death shall be more. Death, thou shalt die.
- by John Donne, renaissance poet
A very good bit of poetry, even if you did steal Donne's title. Your format makes it hard to read - your author's note blends in with the end of your poem.
Also, you're line length needs to be more even - the flow was a bit jerky - but very good writing; wonderful imagery and emotion through use of evocative language.