|Reviews for Aftermath: A Story of Blended Clichés’|
| tacaloking chapter 13 . 7/23
i complain when people do the rush line thing but you are one of the few people who realize how to use it in a written format unlike most people who expect the reader to figure out what happen you know better who make sure the character says it again so the reader understands what that character says which is probably why i am not saying to avoid using it in the future your the only person i seen use that who actually seems to know it needed to be used differently then how they do in tv shows and movies
| tacaloking chapter 2 . 7/21
i been reading this for years and this among my favorite fanfiction even the i think the akane being a lesbian does not count as a cliche as i only seen one fanfic of her paired with a girl not counting ranma and i read thousands of ranma fanfiction but i think this story has one of the best story arks existing in ranma fanfiction of of course you could of fit another cliche the complete saintly nodoka who never even hurt a bug and the monster genma whose hobby's are raping and killing and sadly thing is i seen over thirty or more fanfics were thats not much of a exaggeration
| fireball900 chapter 11 . 2/23
I'm finding the parallels between Ranma and Sailor Sun's backgrounds striking here. Especially since Sailor Sun's upbringing makes sense.
You're handling the implications of a Weapon of Mass Destruction really well here
| maryjane5000 chapter 33 . 2/9
Well aside from
1) There is no " marks around the characters lines to tell when they are speaking 90% of the time
2) Words in wrong places like "she felt like she looked like hell" it should be "she felt like hell and she looked like it" or "she felt and looked like hell"
3) Missing words like "Ukyo can we friends again" it should "Ukyo can we please be friends again"
4) Missing or wrong punctuation points
5) Misspellings like "with that is mind" should be "with that in mind"
6) Missing lines like "What did Cologne's eyes widen at?"
7) The ending was rushed
This is a good fic I just wish a little longer because there's a few things left unanswered like
1) How was the Nekoken cured?
2) Is Akiko/Serenity really dead?
3) What happened to Michiko, Megumi & Ranma's other friends?
4) What happened in Nermia after Ranma left?
5) What is the goddess's plans for Ranma?
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/7
Ok you need to pull this up and edit it cause in this chapter alone 95% of the time when someone is talking you can't tell as their is no " marks around their lines & it gets confusing
| Reymen chapter 17 . 9/6/2015
Ranma should put out a add on internet that Sailor Sun searching science experiment to power. Or something like that. If you have the power of the galaxy and manage to get all high shools on the planet to work on how to use it.
Clean earth and jump forward with society how many years?
Ranma should be able to create matter consider how much power she have. So the only thing he need is guidance. Then we solve his builder problem.
| Reymen chapter 11 . 9/6/2015
I am surprised that they did not mentally dissect her and create some kind of slave without the possibility of thinking something else then ordered by the queen.
| Reymen chapter 9 . 9/6/2015
Good that you are not trying to make it easy on Ranma consider how much mind fuck he have been exposed to.
I dislike every story that have a mental plane and solve all mental problem by physically doing something on the "mental plane" and magically solve it.
| Reymen chapter 3 . 9/6/2015
Question do you know of any SM story where the character utterly loathes their previously life and deny it completely?
I have one story about SMNanoha crossover where Nanoha dislike her previously life as the Moon princess. But nothing more then that.
| Guest chapter 1 . 6/10/2015
After Ranma and Nodoka come back down suddenly all the double quotation marks ("") are gone. I stopped reading not that much later simply because it was too difficult/bland to read the text while guessing what exactly is said and what is thought or described. It was especially jarring because you did use them earlier. Sorry it feels as if you did not put much effort in the story if you did not even catch that rather obvious and frequent mistake.
| Guest chapter 6 . 6/3/2015
the Story is good but you take killing someone to light. when someone heres that they will avoid that person at all cost even if you killed a murder. protecting yourselves or a rapist. now hip was not as bad as a rapist. now reason for people to talk to her/him for killing someone if its A) small community and everybody knows everybody. B) already know the people C) they are dont have common sense in that place ex 1) you were born in a war zone use to death from that place D) they can sympise with you
| End.User chapter 1 . 6/1/2015
Consistent use of quotation marks, formatting, and proper use of they're their and there. This fic could really use these.
| GeorgeTobor chapter 33 . 4/20/2015
| Tibricel Tibby chapter 1 . 3/27/2015
Loved this story and how it all in folded. Thanks for writing it.
| reality deviant chapter 33 . 1/21/2015
this is quite the fic.
though i found only the tenchi part captivating-its due to personal tastes rather than any fault of yours.
said part was really good, right until the ending- again, due to my tastes.