|Reviews for Aftermath: A Story of Blended Clichés’|
| Stary Wylk chapter 7 . 10/10/2021
Finally, some rational ethics.
| 5074 chapter 10 . 7/25/2021
...that’s not fair. Eventually, after all’s said and done, and the incorporation is complete, she’ll just be Sailor Sun with a little extra tacked on at the end. The absence of something can shape one’s identity just as much as the presence of something. And I don’t like how you’re portraying her desire to make her own personal choices as wrong or the influence of negativity.
The logical outcome of this is that she remembers more and more until eventually she just goes; “Oh, those 16 years weren’t very important at all in the grand scheme of things, were they?” Sailor Sun is just so much MORE than Ranma, and eventually Ranma will just be a single drop of water in an ocean.
But it’s okay, because she’ll be happy and whole, right? If you know someone would be happier or better off a certain way, then of COURSE it’s okay to take the choice out of their hands, right? The part of yourself that’s keeping you from being happy and whole is just something to be destroyed, excised like the tumor it is, right? Ranma just needs to let go of her attachment to personal choice and let things get to the way they SHOULD be, right?
...alright, rant over. Despite my overreaction, this is very well-written. Trust me, there’s definitely worse stuff out there, far worse. And remember, cliches and tropes are, at the end of the day, just tools. It’s the artist’s skill that determines how good a painting turns out, not what kind of brush they use. And honestly, in this day and age of subversion and edginess, a straightforward piece of fiction is quite refreshing. I should probably delete the above rant, but I feel like there might have been a scrap or two of genuine critiques amid that pile of salt.
| WPGanimefan chapter 18 . 2/21/2021
No disrespect intended but so the first chapter and this chapter are a lot better then the others...so far. & because of your fic it makes wonder if Serenity was alive in the original series as Luna & Artemis used a command centre to speak with someone
| Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 1 . 9/10/2020
what the fuck is wrong with you? Can you even write properly? "thru" is not a fucking word at all. grow a bloody brain and use proper English. it's super annoying otherwise. I hate having to make reviews like this but I get really pissed off when I see that shit.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/30/2019
Nokoda? Nodoka may be.
| Derich chapter 18 . 3/15/2019
Very nice twist at the end of this epilogue.
Anyway, onward for the university arc!
| ChildofDragons chapter 18 . 12/29/2018
I think if I had one issue with this overall fanfiction it would be the lack of any real comeuppance for Sailor Pluto.
She manipulated Ranma's life and put her through hell leading to situations where any normal girl would've been in real danger. Pluto did all this in an effort to manipulate Ranma further then tried to kill her the first chance she had and while it may have been for the 'greater good' or out of fear of Sun's power there were no real consequences for Pluto except a punch to the jaw earlier on and a scolding. This isn't to mention what Pluto did to her in her last life.
In fact Ranma straight up forgives her and they become friends. It was very anti-climatic.
| Hikari Nova chapter 1 . 12/25/2018
interesting but there's points you forget to use quotation marks
| tacaloking chapter 13 . 7/23/2016
i complain when people do the rush line thing but you are one of the few people who realize how to use it in a written format unlike most people who expect the reader to figure out what happen you know better who make sure the character says it again so the reader understands what that character says which is probably why i am not saying to avoid using it in the future your the only person i seen use that who actually seems to know it needed to be used differently then how they do in tv shows and movies
| tacaloking chapter 2 . 7/21/2016
i been reading this for years and this among my favorite fanfiction even the i think the akane being a lesbian does not count as a cliche as i only seen one fanfic of her paired with a girl not counting ranma and i read thousands of ranma fanfiction but i think this story has one of the best story arks existing in ranma fanfiction of of course you could of fit another cliche the complete saintly nodoka who never even hurt a bug and the monster genma whose hobby's are raping and killing and sadly thing is i seen over thirty or more fanfics were thats not much of a exaggeration
| fireball900 chapter 11 . 2/23/2016
I'm finding the parallels between Ranma and Sailor Sun's backgrounds striking here. Especially since Sailor Sun's upbringing makes sense.
You're handling the implications of a Weapon of Mass Destruction really well here
| maryjane5000 chapter 33 . 2/9/2016
Well aside from
1) There is no " marks around the characters lines to tell when they are speaking 90% of the time
2) Words in wrong places like "she felt like she looked like hell" it should be "she felt like hell and she looked like it" or "she felt and looked like hell"
3) Missing words like "Ukyo can we friends again" it should "Ukyo can we please be friends again"
4) Missing or wrong punctuation points
5) Misspellings like "with that is mind" should be "with that in mind"
6) Missing lines like "What did Cologne's eyes widen at?"
7) The ending was rushed
This is a good fic I just wish a little longer because there's a few things left unanswered like
1) How was the Nekoken cured?
2) Is Akiko/Serenity really dead?
3) What happened to Michiko, Megumi & Ranma's other friends?
4) What happened in Nermia after Ranma left?
5) What is the goddess's plans for Ranma?
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/7/2016
Ok you need to pull this up and edit it cause in this chapter alone 95% of the time when someone is talking you can't tell as their is no " marks around their lines & it gets confusing
| Reymen chapter 17 . 9/6/2015
Ranma should put out a add on internet that Sailor Sun searching science experiment to power. Or something like that. If you have the power of the galaxy and manage to get all high shools on the planet to work on how to use it.
Clean earth and jump forward with society how many years?
Ranma should be able to create matter consider how much power she have. So the only thing he need is guidance. Then we solve his builder problem.
| Reymen chapter 11 . 9/6/2015
I am surprised that they did not mentally dissect her and create some kind of slave without the possibility of thinking something else then ordered by the queen.