Reviews for Keitaro's Lucky day!
The Marshmallow Man chapter 1 . 11/10/2011
awesome luccky day story, i think Kei finally deserves a day like that, after all the crap he puts up with
Guest chapter 1 . 3/28/2005
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Dark-Hand chapter 1 . 5/10/2004
it's always nice to Keitaro's luck change.
The story read more like a list than a story, maybe if less things happened (like the electrical wins, bono ) then the story could read better. OR just fill out the bits between each event.
Shoshiro chapter 1 . 3/29/2004
Pretty good story. I can't believe Keitaro's luck held together that long. I think the only thing wrong with it...is, wel...K/N? THAT IS THE GREATEST EVIL KNOWN TO MODERN HUMANITY! Well, next to Keitaro/Seta and Keitaro/Haruka, anyway...
ShadowScythe chapter 1 . 3/29/2004
well first off this is a pretty good idea seeing as our unlucky hero never gets a break but oh well you have somewhat of a good start...some small grammer errors no spellings mistakes that i could see but then again i'm not really trying to look for them but one problem i do have is that Handsome is not Tanrei its tansei, Tanrei could be used as a persons name...now that doesnt sound good eh having the name Handsome all the time but it would of been better to use the word Hansamu which is a more commonly used word for Handsome within the japanese language since Tansei is more used to describe someone who is noble looking but anyway i'm sure it was a slip up on the word and this still is a good start and you know what they say "Practice makes Perfect" and as long as you keep your eyes open and towards the horizon you can be nothing but better so keep up the good work
-Shadowscythe
Knight's Shadow chapter 1 . 3/29/2004
I liked it time his luck changed.
Niak chapter 1 . 3/29/2004
thats a funny story
only thing that seems off is the 10 yen Entertainment Center, while that is pretty good it only comes out to be like 9500 dollers. In reality, thats not a lot for an entertainment center.
Regrem Erutaerc chapter 1 . 3/29/2004
Very interesting concept. Very nicely done as well... except for one thing. Keitaro's luck could not just happen like that out of the blue. What if his bad luck was caused because of a strange aura of bad luck surrounding him? If that was the case, you could have something happen, such as a lightning bolt hitting him while he's touching one of Su's machines, that could somehow completely reverse his luck to being UNBELIEVABLY good(such as all the girls suddenly acting that way towards Keitaro). There's always a price though for such luck though... maybe you could have it so that he started to have worse luck with his male friends, but have incredible luck on EVERYTHING else? Especially with women.;):D
Nutty AL chapter 1 . 3/29/2004
Hm. Different this time! Update asap!
Keeper Darius chapter 1 . 3/29/2004
gr, we arent stupid in Canada, ENgland and Japan house people too small to play real football, andBeckham is the star soccer player of England, I am a fan of soccer so i know
and it is everyone that is wrong
anyway
update soon
potter-man the first
Andrew Joshua Talon chapter 1 . 3/29/2004
ARGH! (beats his head against the wall)
DUDE! WHY HAVE YOU CROSSED OVER TO THE DARKSIDE?
K/N? NO!
Baka-Alaskan chapter 1 . 3/28/2004
Very nice Shi-san. Great to see more stuff from you. Like the uses of football, instead of soccer. I've even stop calling it that, well most of time. Anyway nice one, waiting for more on your other storys. Good Job!
Shigure-Souma chapter 1 . 3/28/2004
Excellent, but, Keitaro's luck can't last for THAT long, right? Good chapter, I like this story, hope we can see more soon.
S.M chapter 1 . 3/28/2004
can't wait to read more,please update as soon as possible