|Reviews for Curse of the Banshees|
| Philosophize chapter 16 . 2/26
Please don't abandon...
| xXLizzie-sanXx chapter 4 . 2/24
Its just uau
This fic is great!
I need to say i didnt like the white haired harry but thats why i didnt imagine him in anime style! Man when i created his image in anime style in my head he was soo cool! Im a huge fan of anime so hahaha
Im still in ch 4 but im already really interested in this fic.
| Runecutter chapter 16 . 2/9
The parts at the school had some interesting ideas and were spot on if you were searching for a way ou of the emotional deadlock Harry stuck in right before the banshee incident.
The aboriginee village of the banshee on the other hand turned the story once again towards the worse. Fantasy language? Vampiric grief eaters now living of fish? Not the least bit impressing for me, sorry. That's a lot like throwing him to the Dementors and then showing a black-handkerchief filled kindergarden.
There must be ways to make them less one track minded and more sympathetic without turning them into pacific islanders just for the giggles.
| Runecutter chapter 15 . 2/9
Okay i give you that this idea of a way to break the curse almost makes up for the sappy thing being included in the story at all. Things that i don't like always make me think and i'm right now at a moment where i would have preferred it, if there was no "turning" involved at all. If magic itself would turn people grieving too much into something like the "Children of Nemesis" or in the style of Erinyes/Furies. Obviously Harry then would not have been a quasi vampiric demon but one who haunts those who have wronged him trying to drive them into insanity or an early grave. And i probably would mirror many of the nightmares he'd have had earlier with the "equal" punishment he'd dish out now... until to his horror he notices that that means he has become his own worst nightmare, no better than a dementor in any sense of the word...
Still this development is better than i had ever hoped since the screaming irish hags (would that make Hagrid an old scottisch banshee-hunter? :D one who gets rid of hags? :P) and the tearjerker level has also gone up constantly over the last few chapters.
| Runecutter chapter 13 . 2/9
Uhh okay? So now he is a Banshai. Why should i care? Again he has given in to the easiest thing and let something happen to him instead of fighting it and shaking it off like he promised himself to deal with this year...
Next station... incredibly inconvenient veela meeting and again a transformation? Well it WOULD fit JKRs SOP in the books of only ever explaining stuff that later on becomes important for the solution of the book(s)... but that would also mean Harry were already doomed through foreshadowing to end up as Draco's buttmonkey... nice perspective for your valiant readers *smirk*
And the cats arenow related to Snape? Well can't be worse than just exotic and super powerful dangerous cute but useless...
| Runecutter chapter 12 . 2/9
"I am becoming a nerd." Nope, he's becoming a swot.
Finally... Not sure if it's really morally okay to force everyone including his sparse supporters or the firsties that were not even present last year to the same moment, but it was desperately needed for his "friends" and the teachers who acted as if Harry was in the wrong to not seek out their acceptance immediately. The Prophet thing with the spoiled children whining why he does not do what they want him to do was the height of cheek. So while it might not have been NICE to force them to finally listen to HIS side, it was necessary, it came at the right time and it was pretty awesome if you remember that he learned this crazy superpowered shit in addition to doing two years of studies in one and having four years in two new subjects to boot.,
and then the Banshees... Were never happy since that subject turned up in the story. Finding some middle ground between being a doormat and all trad upon again and totally severing all ties to the wizarding world was hard enough as a theme for this story and would have sufficed to fill lots of chapters. Saddling this crazy weird special fairy tale stuff upon the poor boy in addition to all his other bagage is just outright cruel. Making Malfoy a "Veela" borders on the childishly silly, sorry. It almost instantly invokes all those horrible "he needs a mate and Harry is to be forced to take it in the... " stories some deeply disturbed people set up all over the internet...
| Runecutter chapter 11 . 2/8
That's more like it!
Now he has three people he can try and build up trust again. And maybe some neutrals like Nathan Flourish he can be mor erelaxed around as they were strangers then and are strangers now.
Ron i fear has just shoveled an even deeper grave for himself by admitting to having hazed the one guy believing Harry was not a monster, as if his testimony wasn't ugly enough now he even took glee in spitting on Harry's memory by proxy? There's no reason this fine "friend" should not feel miserable for the next fifty years after that year.
Granger i think has had enough. She'll start imagining how it was for Harry and if she isn't already sleeping bad from nightmares it's only a question of time now that she knows which one she should share... Sometimes a really creative brain is not a blessing. And again i cannot see much fault with letting her suffer for a while... if at least she had been bullied into silence or hampered from giving a positive character portrait to the court. If her testimony would have been taken and bent into something else by the bought/death eater sympathizing judges... If anything had made her words not her real choice and her conscience already revolting before the trial... then she might deserve clemency. But when she willingly condemned Harry to hell? Feed the gal to the Banshees for all i care. Or better yet, make her stop to treat Harry as her personal confessor and parish priest giving the sacraments. Who amongst those mental midgets even tried to make him feel welcome, help him relax or not look over his shoulder constantly in fear the next horde is approaching trying to browbeat him into cosplaying as mother Theresa... How can wounds EVER heal if you keep on pulling off the scab time and again with that badgering? Stupid students.
Has anybody cared to give a rebuttal of their court testimonies to the papers? To make it known that not only was Harry innocent but also that they drove him deeper into trouble for all the wrong reasons?
| Runecutter chapter 9 . 2/8
Aergh you're really making it hard to love your story, you know?
What kind of language is Luscar meant to be? Greek for wolf is Lykos, therefor "lycanthropy", latin is Lupus, as in Canis Lupus for example. The only other language used in spell creation that we know of seems to be persian or aramean which donated the words or some roots that ended up as Avada Kedavra.
And once again Dumbledore is playing games with other peoples choices... Who is he to decide that their discomfort at feeling guilt is worth more than Harry's discomfort at seeing their ugly mugs everyday for the next two years just so dumbledore can feel a bit better about them all "healing". You shall know us through out deeds... actions are the best way to demonstrate remorse and changed behavior. Yet everybody Harry meets just is talking about how sorry they are and doesn#t give him any chance if he WANTS to forgive the people that have haunted his nightmares day and night for thirteen months. I'm all for Harry not ending up insane and murderous, not wanting revenge and not seeking recompense frm anybody who wronged him, but i cannot see anything wrong in wanting to be left alone and not reminded all the time about the most hellish time in his life. He had barely ten weeks without reminder, less if you count Diagon Alley after the credit card incident and Hermione butting in on his vacation island. Doesn't ANYBODY in magical britain posess a grain of tact and sensitivity?
As for a pairing... ehhh what? I'm sure he'll be ready someday to trust somebody so much again to let them into his heart, but a pairing at Hogwarts? From one of his torturers? From one of the people judging him worthy of this punishment? Of hating him out of principle because they could not see beyond the trick and remember it was HARRY they were deeming dark?
Although with your tradition of making him give in with the slightest bit of insistance he'll end up with Ginny and all day surrounded by the despicable Weasley family who first gave up on him AND whose youngest male has gleefully betrayed him by telling lies in court.
For Quidditch... he should plead a fear of the noise the wind makes when blowing through the corridors of Azkaban and thus bail out of the stupid game. Or a reluctance to be in any open places, even though that might not work with his island holiday... ;) They burned his broom why should he make them feel better by winning their nice little leisure sports for them?
I'm all for moderation and forgiveness, but the first one only goes so far and the second one has to be earned. Making friends should start with people having stood up for him during his trial, but as of yet none were mentioned... not even Luna, Neville or any of the puffs usually used in such a position. And with everything so fresh in his memory moderation already IS expressed when he simply ignores anybody around him and does not freak out constantly about the impunity some people posess to dare and demand anything from him after his last year and their role in it. And if you add many more scenes like the nightmare when Hermione assaulted him in his vacation hotel or this one about christmas in Azkaban and the deep plunge into despair it meant for the once so hopeful boy... then they all can go and rot in hell for what it's worth. Some things just can't be forgiven and the burden on Harry's shoulders rapidly goes into this territory... Shrink, indeed... he probably will make the poor psychiatrist have nightmares.
| Runecutter chapter 8 . 2/8
Dude, NOBODY has flamed you (at least not in the messages still openly viewable in the review section. Stating weaknesses or dislike for a story is NOT flaming. Flaming starts with personal insults and unnecessary improper language. Cool rationing and clearly labeled subjective opinion does not even come close to that. A flamewar is two monkeys flinging poo at each other and laughing all the while about this "funny" pastime... you are complaining bitterly about somebody blowing a raspberry at you and set it equal to the uglier thing.
Be that as it may... i cans ee what SOME of the reviewers find so appaling with Harry accepting everything that is pushed on to him. Healing the boy that got injured was the right thing to do. But becoming best chums with his rowdy friends? That's stupid on so many levels... and the Hermione scene just makes me wish he could develop legilimancy on his own so he could SHOW all his oppressors how much their remorse and craving for forgiveness means to him by sharing his darkest moments and most desperate hours with them. Not to hurt them, not as payback. Just to make them understand and shut up.
as for the minitigers... the idea behind the name is okay, but why does it have to be something exotic? Let the indish have indian names... in England it just will sound pretentious and arrogant to call your big fluffy walking carpets such a name. A lot like Anime where suddenly a person called Asuka Soryu Langley will be a german born... yeah, sure. (indian, japanese and american name put together "instant european supername!" YAY!)
| Runecutter chapter 7 . 2/8
The way they came into his hands? Trouble and mischief without a doubt :P
Oh what a fun day to spend just because Dumbledore breathes through his backside... why the heck is Gringotts not on the "allowed list" for Harry's mail? If nothing else he might have Dobby check daily on a p.o. box at the bank and bring anything important right to Harry's nightstand so he can take care of it. It's not even "magic"
And you've left off the shop keepers FAR too easy with their blackmailing him into taking care of the kittens. Flourish especially... After all HIS acts have left Harry unable to defend himself and caused him spending a full year in the Dementor Spa and Ressort. He might as well have lead Voldemort's hand while casting the lethal curse so well did he follow the Dark Lord's wishes when dooming Harry to the isolation and desperation fo what passes amongst wizards as jail. He might have been hurt, but he was needlessly cruel and caused more suffering than he himself had to endure...where's the justice in that?
But on the plus side the emotional aspect of your character descriptions and inner monologues have incredibly gained in depth and believability. Had Harry started out as the crude caricature of an abused PoW right after Azkaban does he now feel really in conflict and restless, as do most of the remorsefilled shopkeepers. Hope you'll keep on with THAT aspect.
| Runecutter chapter 4 . 2/8
Not sure about britain, but in Germany you'd need to be eighteen before you are allowed to make the kind of legally binding contracts that are needed everytime you use a credit card, so while your parents might trust you with their card you cannot under any circumstances get one by yourself at that age (from a muggle bank).
Why does he not eat dinner and breakfast? His deal at the gym included "eat all the meals there" in his premium package?
Oh and just for the record... white hair sucks. And Harry should loath it as a constant reminder of what he went through. Maybe a 3mm haircut to make the SCAR stand out more? Sounds at least more realistic than the chinese humbug movie romance. What is worse... Harry with long pale hair makes him look like a sissy-brother to inbearable Draco Malfoy... what a recommendation to wear it that way. Yuck!
Right, that's a lot of negative stuff to pull out. Am i unfair to a so-so story just trying to find its way? Nah, i see it rather as having standards how good a story should be at least until you start fawning and cheering about it without pointing out the things that could make it a better story. This one certainly is not abysmal, but far from feeding exuberant feelings of joy and thankfulness either.
| Runecutter chapter 3 . 2/8
Yeah, whatever you say, SNAPE.
Harry should build a bridge and get over himself. Yeah it's early for that, but this talking to himself can only end in disaster (or worse ... a horrible story). To show them how wrong they were is a stupid idea. Just let them live in ignorance and enjoy your freedom now you've got it back... show them the cold shoulder like they had disregarded your pain and emotional disarray last year is more than enough payback.
Wanting to show them up by becoming something better is a slippery slope and will lead to extreme cases of Malfoy *shudder*
| Runecutter chapter 2 . 2/8
Really? A total stranger taking delight in snapping Hedwig's neck just for the giggles of it? Why is he even free to go where he wants during his trial, he should sit in a holding cell at some DMLE facility or in the ministry... In our world murderers that were arrested by the police don't get free during the trial either (or only on high payments of bail but that's only in the USA not in civilized countries :P) why should they in the far more medieval and unforgiving world of magic? They chain defendants to the chair in the courtroom and depend on souleating monsters to guard them when in jail... so why would they let him go and make some purchases?
The "we burn everything you own" scene in Gryffindor tower is one of the worst clichés i've ever encountered. Only slightly above "Censure". Especially since "he has cast a Dark curse to kill people" does not make the least sense during Harry's fourth year... he was quite a bit behind on his own studies and had to fight hard with age appropriate spells like the Summoning charm to get them to work, how, when and WHY would he resort to a magical bomb boobytrapping the trophy? Granger not believing him is the hardest part to buy as in the book they were more or less connected at the hip in this book/year and she would have known if he had studied and learned to cast such a powerful deadly curse during their training sessions. Or that he just had not enough time outside of them to have managed it.
And even if there were any doubt about the capacity and necessary time to acquire the ability to cast this curse... what would he have won by killing a hundred people in a stadium filled with a thousand? Who all would have seen what he did and could easily overwhelm the most powerful wizard in such a situation. Andwould know what he did even if he could escape what he obviously did not even try. So for this to work all the wizarding world basically needs to be zerobrainers like Fudge for the whole time between the incident and the moment Harry was pulled from his cell by the Death Eaters. And we are to believe not a single one of them doubted and tried to provide counterproof for his conviction? Nobody was loyal enough in the house of the brace and righteous to reserve judgement until Harry himself had a chance to say his bit about this? ESPECIALLY Granger?
It's a big, steaming pile of bull which needs all the people at Hogwarts and around it to act like complete and utter morons just to work.
And then there were the kittens... yeah, sure. Magical super awesome speciul animals. *yawn* Never seen that done ina fic... at least not interesting enough not to kill a lot of mood and suspension during the fic because the speciul beasts need their bit of glory by killing bad guys and saving the day and being all that the humans strangely could and would not be.
| Runecutter chapter 1 . 2/8
Hmmm yeah i can see what you wanted to achieve here and as far as to that attempt it's a good idea. Regrettably it does not really succeed and so much of the potential effect it might have had goes wide and sizzles away in the big empty nothing without so much as a small emotional impact.
Voldemort for example sounds like a complete and utter douchebag. Not the least menacing but more like desperately clinging onto the little of his power he still has left over. Ab operetta villain much like Fudge served as during the first five books...
And then there's the question of perspective... you start out with Harry's view and then change a lot throughout the rest of the chapter... basically playing with an omniscient narrator perspective without really committing to it by employing the omniscient voice doing its job... I think the emotional impact of the chapter/Snippet would have been vastly improved if you had clung to Harry as the narrating pov character and shown EVERYTHING through his eyes. Including a running commentary to how weak he feels, how desperate he is, how hollow inside, whatever. Who cares what some fool from the visitor's box feels when they start to realize how badly they wronged him? Harry's in a bad place right now and we should have accompanied him instead of being safely wrapped into the ignorance of all people watching passively while he suffered.
| The Observant Reader chapter 16 . 2/3
Sad to think that you stopped this story, I wish you finished it!