|Reviews for A Marauder's Girl|
| M. Jackson Potter chapter 8 . 2/2
Janine is kind of Mary-Sue-ish.
| R pl chapter 5 . 11/25/2013
| tigerlilly chapter 7 . 11/15/2013
i read it and thought that it explained alot thx !
i think you are really a brilliant writer
| Guest chapter 21 . 9/26/2013
That kiss was a little much.
| OHMYGOSH chapter 20 . 9/26/2013
This is one of THE BEST FANFICS I HAVE EVER READ EVER! OMG James's (that sounds weird) performance it made me embarrassed just THINKING about it! If i was in Lily's spot, OMG I would DIE! DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE! But it was hilarious still! Do you love to write? I know stupid question, but i was just wondering. I love love love to write. And read this fanfic! OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG! This story is just soooooooooooo AMAZING!If you owned the Harry Potter story/books/plot whatever, I'm sure you qould make soooooooooooo much money! Ok, now I'm being weird, but it's soooooooooooo true! I'm going to read your story now. Bye bye.
P.S. I LOVE THIS STORY!
| Guest chapter 16 . 9/26/2013
You say that they are in their fourth year, but you also say they are 16. Shouldn't they be in their sixth year?
| Guest chapter 7 . 9/25/2013
I did read the author's note. It was quite fun to read. Great story!
| Cosette chapter 2 . 9/25/2013
Regulus and potter supposed to be seeker. Loved the story, loved how you don't use a lot of swear words and such. Loved plot and everything about it.
| minesndvl chapter 26 . 4/25/2013
are you american? I like your stories, i really do :)
I'm sorry if you get offended by my review. But, I'm just being honest. I'm sorry if I offend you with my honesty. I just hope this review helps in the future when you write more hp fan fics :)
at first, i imagined them (hp characters) saying those dialogs and all but as i read further and further, it seems like you're the one who's talking. Not them anymore. And I think it would be nice/better if you write it more... british or something. like, saying british words (deep brit words and not so american) (just saying) etc and seriously, "shit" "fuck" i can't imagine them saying it. More like, blimey, bloody hell, bugger off etc oh well this might help . ?languageBritish#.UXldv7VabwY just search more. I think harry potter fan fics will be a lot MORE nice if its written like how JKR wrote it. Know what I mean? I'm not saying you should write EXACTLY like her, but british enough and the characters should stick to their personality. Personally, I think Lily's being an arse. And very very thick too. I see She's somehow like Hermoine. And she's sort of pathetic. (i'm not saying hermoine's pathethic) I mean, she's soooo annoying like why can't she just piss off and give the boys some space. Why can't she just stop being so annoying and close-minded and stuff like that.
I think, for one, that's not how Lily was. I imagined her someone sweet (maybe hated James Potter a liittle BUT not getting too overboard!) So yeah, Lily such an ass in your story. And I find that a bit annoying.
So, in my opinion, just make it more british, and Lily to NOT be so annoying. AND Lily and company (for me) seemed like annoying clique of blonde girls who goes off flirting everyone and getting mad and being a complete arse.
kay i know it's 2013 and you're probably done with the story. and you probably won't see this (and if you do, you probably won't mind at all at my criticisms lol) I juust hope I gave you important points on how to make your future hp related fan fics in the future :) That is all. Good day to you and keep on writing awesome stories! ;)
| minesndvl chapter 4 . 4/24/2013
i actually laughed during remus and janine's convo haha! good job! :)
| Guest chapter 33 . 4/3/2013
OMFG how is this complete? Can u pleasee update or finish.
| Guest chapter 9 . 3/2/2013
Is janine kissing... sirius? One of thhe marauders, i bet.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/1/2013
| LilyLuna257 chapter 23 . 11/9/2012
Wait wait, no freshly baked cookies, remember? It's one of the Rule thingys. You can't ask for food, it doesn't provide it.
| Rhiannon chapter 24 . 9/3/2012
did i miss something, why was he ib a bad mood ? hmm...