Reviews for First Kiss
Shatsui chapter 12 . 3/24/2006
Wow... to have updated this story on the day I got my wisdom teeth out, of all days. XD *screams* Ok... I liked this chapter, but it almost seems like Inuyasha is suddenly becoming too nice. I know sometimes it'll make it where he thinks "Did I just say that out loud?" Or something... But I... I dunno, maybe I'm just more used to the cocky, cursing, jealous, name calling Inuyasha who shows his nice side only to Kagome... XD And his nice side isn't even as nice as nice can seem to be when it's nice. XD. ... . . . . . ... that made sense, right? o.o;

Anyway, I liked the chapter. I'd like to see a lot more of Rin and Sesshomaru. :D I love them together! Rin's so awesome. Sesshomaru could be a little colder, I think... Like, his personality seems a little too... normal? Like a normal person when he's bored... Show the coldness! XD Think tragic! Think evil! Think broccli! ...Wait, what? Maybe what I ment to say was... Make him fresh? XD Umm...

I'd really like to see some jealousy role in... You know, not really in the sense of Kouga suddenly apearing and fancying Kagome... I mean like... Find other guys, too. :D Same with Rin...

To be completly blunt and honest... I don't give a crap about Sango. XD I never really liked her. :p But, OH WELL! That's me! XD

Okay so... This is my suggestions list, to put it simply:

Make Inuyasha meaner (so to speak...jealousness works too I guess...haven't seen his demon side... don't know if he ever WILL have a demon side... it's your story after all...XD)

Make Sesshomaru colder towards Inuyasha (he hates him, for goodness sakes! XD) and make him a slight bit more... um... indifferent?

Ditch Sango (just kidding.. XD)

Pull out jealousy by using people other than the obvious.

Make the story all about Sesshomaru and Rin...





I guess THAT dream will never come true! XD

Once Kikyo comes into the picture... make her really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, REALLY, really cold towards Kagome-chan! XD But not so cold as in being an annoying sort of cold... like... make it a funny cold, AND a mean cold... if that's possible... Make Kikyo stupid? Make her not know stuff that Kagome knows! XD Make her say CORNY stuff! *bashes Kikyo into the floor with a large mallet* MAKE HER AN IDIOT! MAKE HER DIE! DIE KIKYO! DIE! DIE! DIEE! *smash smash SMASH!* ...

Sorry...This is a really long review... Sorry... But it is... You basically know what I think would be fun in this fanfiction already... uhh... Good luck with your story! XD

REMEMBER! Jealousy is KEY! XD (please don't just use Kouga... I feel bad for him...everyone always makes him an idiotic rapist or something. D:)

Jamie chapter 12 . 3/13/2006
Sorry I can't give you any suggestions. WOW. This was really good. I liked how you got in just enough of everybody. I'm glad Rin finally was able to get it out to Kag and Sango and I like how you had Inu be the messenger. GREAT job, UPDATE SOON. Bye.
D3m0n Slay3r chapter 12 . 3/8/2006
OMG Fluffy's nice?

j/p I liked this chapter.
rose b chapter 12 . 3/7/2006
for some reason i think you were listin to rent while writing this...
a-hidden-shadow chapter 11 . 1/21/2006
yes i hate you for leaving us there. but that was cute so i'll let it be...update soon-shadow
obssesed-fic-fan chapter 11 . 1/19/2006
OniyuriGaaru chapter 11 . 1/14/2006
hey! hmm i wonder who that is from... lol please update soon! bye!
Jamie chapter 11 . 1/9/2006
When you say 'soon' does that mean within this month? Hopefully. There was one mistake...

'You’re sounding I won the lottery.”' Should be sounding like.

Great job, I really liked it...even if I did have to reread the last chapter. UPDATE SOON. Bye.
rose b chapter 11 . 1/9/2006
AH! you didn't tell me you updated!
Shippo-kun347 chapter 11 . 1/8/2006
AW COME ON MAN! It was getting nice and juicy. DAMMIT!
kamilog chapter 11 . 1/8/2006
OH i think it is from yashy but that is my opinon! hehe thats so cute i wish guys at my school where that thoughtful! *curses them from under beath* hehe i hope you continue and HURRY!
moonlitStarDestiny chapter 11 . 1/8/2006
_ I'm just glad you updated! Oh wow, that was so sweet, that was inuyasha right? YES! BWAHAHAHAHAHA, they must triumph! meh meh meh...RIN AND SESSHOMARU! -_- sorry I drank a citrus drop...highly caffeinated! must see more sesshy and Rin...But thanks for updating, and you better have more time for writing, or I'll have to send you a package, and there won't be any mistletoe! J/k or am I? kukukukukukukuku


YumiDarkness chapter 5 . 10/9/2005
actually i was waiting for a VERY detailed paragraph of Sesshoumau taking a shower...(drool)
toothpaste chapter 3 . 9/14/2005
th9is is very good i like it
kamilog chapter 10 . 9/12/2005
I LIKE IT! lol it is really good i can't wait till the next chapter!
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