|Reviews for Coming Home|
| PaulW.VinD.BradP.NickC.ChrisH chapter 1 . 5/19
First, the format itself is off putting. The name and semicolon thing is just unnecessary. It doesn't read like a story. Second, the pace is much too fast. You haven't even developed a storyline and yet the dialogue is all over the place from the very beginning. Third, if you're going to write in past tense, then do so. Your tenses are all over the place which also makes the story hard to read. Fourth, this is just my opinion and is only meant as constructive criticism. I would suggest you allow someone to beta this story. The summary was interesting and I admit I would still like to read it but not in its current form.
| Guest chapter 5 . 1/19/2015
| Crystalzap chapter 5 . 11/21/2011
awesome story and great ending! :)
though I don't know how you think Chris is just gonna 'get over' Wyatt killing his friends in front of him, slowly...
| Fiction Ghost Writer chapter 5 . 5/6/2011
Very nice. I always thought that Chris should get Excaliber.
| Fawkes Flame chapter 5 . 6/30/2010
I've just read your story and it was awesome!
I love your idea that Excalibur "turns" Wyatt -
the Idea was really great!
I love your writing - thank you for sharing it with us!
At last: SORRY for my really bad English - I'm German and
it's not my native Language...
| Marcus1233 chapter 5 . 5/20/2007
Beautifully and powerfully written. An A on the actions (Chris' trial with the demons).
Glad I didn't feel bad that it has ended. Don't take it the wrong way...I really enjoyed this fic and liking it...
| Marcus1233 chapter 3 . 5/20/2007
You are the second writer to exclude Gideon as Wyatt's turning, but Excalibur as the reason. You have both succeeded in playing the play elements in Charmed quite well.
| Marcus1233 chapter 2 . 5/20/2007
I like how the story is flowing. Such drama...all the betrayal..with family like that...I prefer a demon for an enemy.
| pmsdevil01 chapter 5 . 1/7/2006
i loved it i read the whole thing at once.
| Riley chapter 3 . 10/3/2005
ah this an amazing story ... I just started reading it a few days ago, but it is still one of the best stories I have ever read... Great job
| crazyChick7 chapter 5 . 9/27/2005
This review is for the whole story. I LOVE IT. It has such a good plot, it's brill, it's really well written. LOVING IT LOL :)
| Idreamofivan chapter 2 . 6/20/2005
Ohh this is great!I would extend my review a lot longer but I have to go now... I'll keep on reading ASAP
| Idreamofivan chapter 1 . 6/20/2005
great... now to chapt 2 (or whatever strange number it is)
| MerlinsDescent chapter 5 . 2/27/2005
PLEASE MAKE A SEQUEL! SOON! I LOVE THIS STORY! I WANT TO SEE THE STORY OF THE THREE! LOL I MADE A RYME!
| dork47 chapter 5 . 1/2/2005
LUV the story! it's so good, your a great writer and i hope to see a sequel soon! but yea, what is wyatt? lol