Reviews for El Hazard Cards Of The Holy War
Kira Saiai chapter 1 . 5/6/2004
Much better!
"Would you act your age", That is one of the mistakes.
"No kidding huh". Another mistake.
I'm really looking forward to your next chapter.
Kira Saiai chapter 1 . 4/23/2004
You should read your story again to check the spellings and punctuatuion marks. And at some places, like when the story switched from the game room to El Hazard, you should leave a few lines to make it clear that the place has changed.
And when you are in El Hazard, try to describe the surroundings a little and tell what the priestesses are doing.
I hope you review my fanfic back. Bye!