Reviews for An Issue Over Trust |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it |
![]() ![]() ![]() Shit, you can't edit your comment here, my reviews' all jumbly coz I was typing while frustrated. But basically, I agree with c12JustLaurie Snape is shit in this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Reading this has filled me with so much frustration and even MORE confusion. It's a tug-of-fucking-war with the way it drags you in all directions. It seemed like the first few chapters had a different author and then they switched in ch. 10, coz it went from well-written and intriguing to a bunch of messy thoughts smashed together in hopes to put every development in one setting without any break in between and expecting it's readers to get the overall development and what just happened. NOTHING IS COHESIVE! Not in their actions, intentions, or dialogue. Harry went to thinking things through and understanding what to do and what not to, to being so fucking unsure of himself and even his thoughts? — Speaking of, HOW IS IT THAT HIS INNER DIALOGUE DOWN-GRADED, WHAT — The same with fucking Snape.. no actually, I think this started since the snape POV was introduced. Shit just went confusing EVERYWHERE. One moment I'm nodding, the next I'm rearing back in confusion. This isn't just being "different" it's straight out whiplash inducing. It's like..A strangely edited movie with randome cuts everywhere. Nothing is just working out. Harry's been put in one abusive household to another — you can't honestly tell me the force-feeding scene wasn't disturbing (or that Harry's worries are unfounded), it just made it look like Snape's the stupid one for not understanding why Harry's doing this, and the gaslight-y it is to make it sound like Harry's the one not being difficult? That HE'S the one at fault here? The writing just gives off that feeling. That, or it's trying to make Snape's actions justified. (ALSO THE LUPIN DECEPTION?) And their "connecting" moment with the confession scene also didn't hit. Overall, if my understanding of the scenes was just simply off the mark. And that it's supposed to look like their both doing it wrong, that they need to communicate how they should learn how to trust each other (like the lunch in the table scene). That's statement enough of how confusing this was written. |
![]() ![]() Canon has more physical violence towards Harry than that... |
![]() ![]() Snape would never willingly let Remus into his house |
![]() ![]() Pls Harry ur so dumb- even I knew it was veretisirem thingy right after the horse chase |
![]() ![]() Oml Harry you idiot- snape hasn’t stooped that low yet |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a great fic |
![]() ![]() Ahaha its Snape lol |
![]() ![]() It’s not lupin, it’s Snape under the poly juice potion. |
![]() ![]() nice :) |
![]() ![]() good story |
![]() ![]() Excellent story and writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was so sweet! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i still don't understand the story and i still think there were 2 snapes in the beginning anyways i hope your brother situation worked out alright. |