Reviews for Light and Laughter
Miriel Amarian chapter 1 . 4/28/2004
Hmm, I never really had a specific Elf couple in mind when I wrote this. I just saw a random Elf couple in my mind, I guess.
ladyevendim chapter 1 . 4/27/2004
Very nice poem. It's free verse, right?
I like the romantic atmosphere of it a lot, and the poem *does* convey light and laughter.
I especially like the lines
"Now I have you, caught in my arms
Will you now submit a kiss from your lord?"
and
"Ah, you are quick, my dear
But not so quick as I"
These just somehow greatly attract me...but that may just be because I'm a sap for fluff. I also like the second a lot because it conveys the character and personality very well; good job on that!
You've got great descriptive ability, esp. apparent in the first two lines; a reader really gets the idea of what the maiden is like. And you end the poem on a good note: the two lovers, though separated, will see each other again.
The only quip I have is that I can't tell between who and who is this going on: Finwe/Miriel? Finwe/Indis? or Aldarion/his-wife-whose-name-starts-with-an-E?
Keep writing! I hope to see more of your poetry! _
Evenstar Elanor chapter 1 . 4/25/2004
this is good, but one thing, if they are in Valinor, why will they draw apart again?
Elfique chapter 1 . 4/25/2004
aww these poems are so sweet...